Great suggestions - thanks, Adrienne! (Wow, we don't explain Linux at all... you're right. Let's fix that.) Let's sprint on this again during class time tomorrow (11am-12:15pm EST) in #fedora-mktg - incorporate these comments, and finish the content (get it to the point where we'd be happy to release it, though minor tweaks may still continue). Find me on IRC (mchua) when class starts, and we'll put up an etherpad and throw the URL out to the marketing mailing list so others can join. --Mel On 04/20/2010 12:06 PM, Adrienne Nelson wrote: > Hi guys! > > I'm from Allegheny too, but I figured I could help here anyway... > especially as someone who understands close to nothing about Fedora. > > I read the press release and I think it is good! > > My suggestions: > > - It might be good to provide a brief description of Linux. I have no > idea how to define Linux and I have a feeling there are some other > people who don't know either. > > -I think you could go into a bit more detail about describing what > exactly Fedora is, in the opening paragraph. > > -In the desktop user section, I don't understand why the printer example > is used. Is it just an example of the sorts of things Fedora can do? > > -I like the Spin section! It makes sense! > > - In Help make Fedora! - be a bit more encouraging - a lot of Fedora is > not just getting people excited about using Fedora, but getting people > excited about being involved in the Fedora community, right? > > I hope this helps. If you want to talk in real life, that would be fine. > I would not be opposed to joining your team, if you are in need of > another team member. > > Again, good job > > Adrienne > > > > > > > On Thu, Apr 15, 2010 at 7:21 PM, Tyler Torbet <torbett@xxxxxxxxxxxxx > <mailto:torbett@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>> wrote: > > Tonight, Dan, Ashley, Sarah, Mel and I worked with our first draft > of the release notes. We reworded many of the sections and added > several new points. As you can tell, this is still a work in > progress so any comments or edits are welcome! > > Here is the wiki page after working on it tonight: > https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/F13_one_page_release_notes#Draft_starts_here > > Tyler > > -- > marketing mailing list > marketing@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx > <mailto:marketing@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> > https://admin.fedoraproject.org/mailman/listinfo/marketing > > -- marketing mailing list marketing@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx https://admin.fedoraproject.org/mailman/listinfo/marketing
