On Fri, 29 May 2009, Eric Christensen wrote:
Thanks to Jack and Paul for stepping up and really getting the release
announcement[1] built. We, at Docs, have reviewed the final draft and
think we are in consensus that it is complete. Please look over it
and see if anything jumps out at you. If not, this is what we'd like
to go with.
I like it. It makes me smile, and not much does.
Minor suggestions:
(1) Change Dr. Brattlesworth to some sort of pun on a Fedora name?
Unless Brattlesworth has some other meaning that I simply don't get.
(2) I read "snares, toils, and dangers" as "snares, trolls, and dangers"
at first, which might be funnier!
(3) "that marvelous creature -- Leonidas" -- perhaps "the Leonidas"?
(4) If (3), then s/Leonidas/the Leonidas/ everywhere appropriate
(5) I believe people adjourn to the "parlour" for cigars and brandy, not
the "sitting room". :)
Good stuff.
--Max
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