Ben is right on "it's" (should be its - the "it" possessive) and about the semicolon. It should be "...great contributors: Dennis Ritchie" (or it can even be "...great contributors, Dennis Ritchie" but the colon adds emphasis). But it's a good dedication. Larry Cafiero On Mon, Oct 24, 2011 at 7:40 AM, Ben Cotton <bcotton@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > Looks great except I don't think the semicolon is appropriate. (Well, > in the context of Dennis Ritchie, maybe we should include as many > semicolons as possible?) I'm not really sure what the correct > punctuation is, maybe it is the semicolon, but it just _feels_ wrong. > Maybe a re-wording would be better? Also, the "it's" should be "its". > > During the preparation of Fedora 16, the computing world lost Dennis > Ritchie -- one of > its great contributors. > > Also, the last sentence should have a comma: "Thank you, Dennis." > > Content-wise, I think it's great. If I've missed any punctuation > pedantry, I'm sure someone else will pick up the banner. :-) > > > BC > > -- > Ben Cotton > -- > docs mailing list > docs@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx > To unsubscribe: > https://admin.fedoraproject.org/mailman/listinfo/docs > -- docs mailing list docs@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx To unsubscribe: https://admin.fedoraproject.org/mailman/listinfo/docs
