On 6/18/11, Manuel Wolfshant <wolfy@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > Hello > > I've created the first version of the ReleaseNotes page for CentOS > 6.0 in the wiki. As usual, corrections / additions / translations are > welcome. > Hi; I just glanced at this after breakfast, and I spotted a few grammatical errors you might wish to change: Section 2: "upstream vendors redistribution policy" should probably be "upstream vendor's redistribution policy." (In fact, I notice this is on the 5.6 release notes page as well.) Section 6.3: "Even as an inexperienced CentOS user we can use your help" sounds a bit like the release team is comprised of inexperienced CentOS users. It is, of course, not! Perhaps something like "Even as an inexperienced CentOS user, you can help the CentOS project!" would work better? This line made me pause as well: "Because we like to know what problems you encountered, if you had problems finding specific information, how you would improve documentation so it becomes more accessible." At the least, it should have a question mark at the end, although it is an awkward question. How does one improve documentation? The average user probably will not know. It might be better to include some specific advice here: get in touch with the dev team, contribute your own documentation, etc. Just my $0.02. Cheers, Cody Jackson _______________________________________________ CentOS-docs mailing list CentOS-docs@xxxxxxxxxx http://lists.centos.org/mailman/listinfo/centos-docs
