Máirín Duffy wrote:
Rahul Sundaram wrote:
"The Fedora Project is a collection of projects sponsored by Red Hat,
and developed as a partnership between the open source community and
Red Hat engineers. The goal of Fedora? The rapid progress of free and
open source software and content. Public forums. Open processes. Rapid
innovation. Meritocracy and transparency. All in pursuit of the best
operating system and platform that free software (link to
http://www.fsf.org/licensing/essays/free-sw.html) can provide."
"Fedora is Linux based operating system and platform that showcases
the the best combination of robust and latest free and open source
software. Fedora is always free for anyone to use, modify, and
distribute. It is built by people across the globe who work together
as a community: the Fedora Project. The Fedora Project is open and
anyone is welcome to join.
"The Fedora Project leads the advancement of free and open source
software. By using Fedora, the best of software created by the Linux
and Free software community is in your hands."
The first paragraph is too long and too fluffy.
Fluffy, yea but but the text you have has two issues that I can spot.
Defining Linux as the operating system instead of Fedora as a Linux
based operating system runs us straight into the Linux vs GNU/Linux
debate which we have carefully sidestepped before.
The last sentence "leading edge" is too close to "bleeding edge". I
would like to emphasize a bit more on robustness too.
Rahul
