On Tue, Dec 02, 2014 at 11:00:17AM -0600, Joe Brockmeier wrote: > On 12/02/2014 10:49 AM, Paul W. Frields wrote: > > As you guys are crafting improved notes, for better consistency, it > > would be great to write in present tense about the release. > > > > INCONSISTENT: "Fedora 21 Foobar will include special flavor crystals > > that defy gravity and help you fly like Superman." > > > > CONSISTENT: "Fedora 21 Foobar includes special flavor crystals that > > defy gravity and help you fly like Superman." > > Be sure to use passive voice too. Paul likes that.[1] > > Best, > > jzb > > [1] May not be entirely true. Consult your attorney. Offer not valid in > Utah. Passive voice is not liked by me! Oh, wait... ;-) Just to clarify -- I think much of the current announcement dervies, from Alpha/Beta so it's natural it reads in future tense. I just figured to get a head start on the rewrite as it comes from multiple people. :-D -- Paul W. Frields http://paul.frields.org/ gpg fingerprint: 3DA6 A0AC 6D58 FEC4 0233 5906 ACDB C937 BD11 3717 http://redhat.com/ - - - - http://pfrields.fedorapeople.org/ The open source story continues to grow: http://opensource.com _______________________________________________ cloud mailing list cloud@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx https://admin.fedoraproject.org/mailman/listinfo/cloud Fedora Code of Conduct: http://fedoraproject.org/code-of-conduct
