2007/10/26, Felipe Balbi <felipebalbi at users.sourceforge.net>: > Hi, > > On 10/27/07, Mauricio Mauad Menegaz Filho <mmauad at gmail.com> wrote: > > Hi all! > > > > After reading some mails about this subject, showing the results for > > both technical and business guys in the company I work for, I realized > > some facts (some of then already pointed out by Roel): > > > > 1- the two-pager looks fine for technical people > > 2- the two-pager looks long for business people > > 3- the two-pager brings too much information for business people > > since that they will forward the e-mail for his first technical head > > if the thing matters (i.e. he will not access us via e-mail, > > jabber, et cetera) > > 4- secretaries deletes .pdf attachments usually > > 5- secretaries actually like to buy stuff (and show their bosses what they > > like to buy) > > Agreed in all of the above. > > > > > Based on this, I'd sketched a rough draft of a one page document > > -- using our oss spirit and borrowing some stuff from the two pager > > to not reinvent the wheel --, aimed for quick reading. Some key words > > as _competitive_, a cool "open source ready" found on the web label, > > and a tour de france bike competition (also found on the web and without > > any copyright info) were used after some research with "secretary mail filters". > > > > Congrats Mauricio, it looks really nice. I'd like to see this one in > my inbox :-) > It's quick, direct to the point, and points the "goodies" of our work. > The "We can make it ready... ... for free" looks perfect :-) > > > I think that we can adopt a twofold marketing strategy, since that > > the business layer must approve business info disclosure anyway. > > On the other side, we must have a strategy focusing the technical > > people (those strongly involved into making things happen on the > > ongoing process of driver development). > > > > As anything around here should (and seems to) be, feel free to > > suggest, attack, change, and even accept the idea as is (perhaps not a > > good idea!). > > > > The one-pager is on the marketing materials wiki: > > Once again... for me it looks really better for a first approach. > Although the two-pager could be used for a "could you get me more info > about your project" mail response :-) > > Congrats... it looks really nice. > > I ack this one :-D > > > > > http://linuxdriverproject.org/twiki/bin/view/Main/MarketingMaterials > > > > > > ---mauad > > _______________________________________________ > > devel mailing list > > devel at linuxdriverproject.org > > http://driverdev.linuxdriverproject.org/mailman/listinfo/devel > > > > > In any case... I have a few comments around the text: > Oh, thanks for that. > "Customers want to"... it's plural... so the verb should follow... > wants is 3rd singular only. ;-) > Instead of "Customers want to have business effective options. > Customers are the owners of the market." you could use "Customers want > to have business effective options, they own the market." > > The correct would be: > "As Linux increases its market share..." > > there's one extra "e" in "credeential", just remove it :-D > > > my 2 cents some dollars actually ;) > - > Best Regards, > Felipe Balbi > felipebalbi at users.sourceforge.net > The modified version is already there. Thanks Felipe. ---mauad
