Genart last call review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05

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Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: 2019-08-04
IETF LC End Date: 2019-08-05
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This draft updates RFC 2031 (The IETF-ISOC Relationship) in light of
the IASA2 changes.  To the extent of that I've followed these changes, the
draft appears to capture my understanding of the current relationship, at least
as it is envisaged by the two parties.  Whether that's how things really
operate could probably be the subject of an extensive debate on the IETF
mailing list. ;-)  [Ready with nits]

Major issues:  None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, first sentence: delete a redundant
"the".

Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, last sentence: remove the spaces in
"IETF - ISOC".

Page 5, section 6, first paragraph, first sentence: change "The" to "the".  As
far as I can tell the ISOC's official name is "Internet Society" without a
capitalized "The" and uses "the" when using the name in sentences.

Page 5, section 6, second paragraph, last sentence: change "board of trustees"
to "Board of Trustees" to match ISOC's usage.

Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, third sentence: change "board of trustees"
to "Board of Trustees".

Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, last sentence: change "arms length" to
"arm's length".





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