Thanks Peter. I entered a No Objection ballot pointing to your review. Alissa > On May 15, 2019, at 9:51 AM, Peter Yee via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> wrote: > > Reviewer: Peter Yee > Review result: Ready with Issues > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-lamps-rfc6844bis-06 > Reviewer: Peter Yee > Review Date: 2019-05-15 > IETF LC End Date: 2019-05-08 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: Ready with Issues. This draft is an update to RFC 6844 dealing with > the CAA RR used to notify CAs as to which CA(s) are allowed to issue > certificates for a particular domain. The issues and nits I note are rather > minor. Apologies for the lateness of this review. > > Major issues: > > Minor issues: > > Page 10, 2nd paragraph: the appearance of "sub.wild.example.com" presupposes > that there was no other RRset that matched sub.wild.example.com (or a "deeper" > domain name) already. That assumption should be noted in this paragraph. > > Page 13, section 5.6: a little context should be given here. This abuse is > only plausible if the domain owner is being given the RRset data by the CA > rather than generating that data itself. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Page 5, 1st partial paragraph: change "with" to "within". > > Page 5, 1st full paragraph: regarding the reference to Section 4, shouldn't > this actually be Section 3? > > Page 8, definition of "Value", 2nd sentence: delete redundant "the". > > Page 15, 1st partial paragraph, 1st partial sentence: change "use" to "used". > > Page 15, section 7, 2nd paragraph: is there a reference available for the term > "WebPKI"? > > Page 15, section 7, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: insert "the" before "issue". > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@xxxxxxxx > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
