Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@xxxxxxxxxxxx> writes: > Reviewer: Christer Holmberg > Review result: Ready with Issues > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-kitten-pkinit-alg-agility-05 > Reviewer: Christer Holmberg > Review Date: 2019-03-01 > IETF LC End Date: 2019-02-17 > IESG Telechat date: 2019-03-07 > > Summary: The draft needs to be more clear on how RFC 4556 is updated. > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: > > Q1: > > For the unfamiliar reader, it is unclear exactly how RFC 4556 is updated. There > is e.g., no text indicating what sections of 4556 are updated, and there is no > "Updates to RFC 4556" section. > > I assume the remainder of the draft then updates RFC 4556, but I think it needs > to be more clear for the unfamiliar reader. > > Even if a "Updates to RFC 4556" section would not be feasible, the document > should indicate what parts/sections of 4556 are updated, and what sections in > the draft defines those updates. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Q2: > > Both the Abstract and the Introduction start with "This document updates > PKINIT,..." > > I think it would be good to first give some background information on the > issue(s), and then state that the document fixes those issues by updating RFC > 4556. Hi Christer, thanks for your review. Greg has created and uploaded a new version (-06) to the tracker that hopefully addresses your concerns. Thanks, --Robbie
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