Reviewer: Robert Sparks Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-mpls-sr-over-ip-02 Reviewer: Robert Sparks Review Date: 2019-02-20 IETF LC End Date: 2019-02-26 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: Ready, but with nits that should be addressed before publication as a Standards Track RFC Nits The 2nd sentence of the introduction is complex. It should be easy to simplify. It would help to place the reference to draft-ietf-mpls-spring-entropy label at "If encoding of entropy is desired". (Or if some other reference is better, use that) In that same paragraph, something is wrong at "make use of entropy label mechanism." Should that be "the entropy label mechanism"? SRGB is used without expansion. Where is "the lower bound" of an SRGB defined? The string "lower bound" doesn't occur in either of the routing-extensions drafts referenced where SRGB is first used. Section 3.1 is about ostensibly about constructing a FIB entry, but its last step is sending a packet. The first sentence in section 3.2 is more complex than it needs to be. It should be easy to simplify. It would be nice if you could make the differences between the routers in figures 3 and 4 visually apparent rather than relying on text to explain the difference. Something like (view in a fixed width font): s-----s i-----i | A +------+ B +-- s-----s i--+--i | At the first paragraph on page 9: s/and then process/and then processes/
