Martin
I am still catching up with all the changes, and it is that time - IETF
meeting time - when the world seems to spin a little faster yielding
four revisions in a day!
One query for you; are you ok with the map-e and map-t features being
defined separately in each module? I had thought to put them in the
common module and then import them, using a prefix.
I had also thought to have a map feature from which map-e and map-t were
derived but that seems unnecessarily complicated.
Tom Petch
----- Original Message -----
From: "Martin Bjorklund" <mbj@xxxxxxxxxx>
To: <mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx>
Cc: <softwires@xxxxxxxx>; <yang-doctors@xxxxxxxx>;
<draft-ietf-softwire-yang.all@xxxxxxxx>; <ietf@xxxxxxxx>
Sent: Wednesday, October 24, 2018 7:31 AM
Subject: Re: Yangdoctors last call review of draft-ietf-softwire-yang-06
Hi,
<mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> Re-,
>
> Fixed the first two ones in my local copy.
>
> id is optional. I'm maintaining it because it is already used by some
> implementations.
Ok, but these implementations propably need to change anyway since the
"id" is no longer the key.
I will just point out that having one key and another integer based
identifier that doesn't serve any purpose looks a bit odd. But if the
WG thinks that it is needed then that's fine (although in this case I
suggest you add some text to the descriptions of these leafs that
explain what the purpose is).
I had a closer look at the iana-tunnel-type module and the
instructions to IANA, and I think that you could make some minor
clarificiations:
In the module description, you have:
This module contains a collection of YANG data types defined
by IANA and used for tunnel types.
perhaps write:
This module contains a collection of YANG identities defined
by IANA and used as interface types for tunnel interfaces.
And in the IANA Considerations section you have:
"base": Contains the value of the tunnel type in lowercase.
maybe instead
"base": Contains the string "ift:tunnel".
/martin
>
> Thank you again for the review. Much appreciated!
>
> Cheers,
> Med
>
> > -----Message d'origine-----
> > De : Martin Bjorklund [mailto:mbj@xxxxxxxxxx]
> > Envoyé : mardi 23 octobre 2018 15:30
> > À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed TGI/OLN
> > Cc : yang-doctors@xxxxxxxx; softwires@xxxxxxxx; draft-ietf-softwire-
> > yang.all@xxxxxxxx; ietf@xxxxxxxx
> > Objet : Re: Yangdoctors last call review of
> > draft-ietf-softwire-yang-06
> >
> > Hi,
> >
> > Thanks for the quick update!
> >
> > I have looked at -11, and have just a few minor comments.
> >
> > o Section 5.1
> >
> > Maybe the tree diagram needs to be re-generated; at least:
> >
> > | +--rw bind-instance* [id]
> >
> > should be
> >
> > | +--rw bind-instance* [name]
> >
> >
> >
> > o Section 8
> >
> >
> > leaf softwire-num-max {
> > type uint32;
> > must ". >= 1";
> >
> > This should be:
> >
> > leaf softwire-num-max {
> > type uint32 {
> > range "1..max";
> > }
> >
> >
> > o Section 8
> >
> > Since you now have "name" as key in the lists, is the leaf "id"
> > still needed?
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > /martin
> >
> >
> >
> > <mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> > > Re-,
> > >
> > > Please see inline.
> > >
> > > Cheers,
> > > Med
> > >
> > > > -----Message d'origine-----
> > > > De : Martin Bjorklund [mailto:mbj@xxxxxxxxxx]
> > > > Envoyé : mardi 23 octobre 2018 10:05
> > > > À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed TGI/OLN
> > > > Cc : yang-doctors@xxxxxxxx; softwires@xxxxxxxx;
draft-ietf-softwire-
> > > > yang.all@xxxxxxxx; ietf@xxxxxxxx
> > > > Objet : Re: Yangdoctors last call review of
> > > > draft-ietf-softwire-yang-06
> > > >
> > > > Hi,
> > > >
> > > > <mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> > > > > Hi Martin,
> > > > >
> > > > > Thank you for the review.
> > > > >
> > > > > We released a new revision -08 to address your comments. We
will
> > > > > double check the formatting and issue another iteration if
needed.
> > > >
> > > > Thank's for addressing my comments. See inline and at the end
for
> > > > some new comments on -08.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > > Please see inline.
> > > > >
> > > > > Cheers,
> > > > > Med
> > > > >
> > > > > > -----Message d'origine-----
> > > > > > De : Martin Björklund [mailto:mbj@xxxxxxxxxx]
> > > > > > Envoyé : lundi 15 octobre 2018 11:00
> > > > > > À : yang-doctors@xxxxxxxx
> > > > > > Cc : softwires@xxxxxxxx;
draft-ietf-softwire-yang.all@xxxxxxxx;
> > > > ietf@xxxxxxxx
> > > > > > Objet : Yangdoctors last call review of
draft-ietf-softwire-yang-06
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Reviewer: Martin Björklund
> > > > > > Review result: Ready with Issues
> > > > > >
> > > > > > This is my YANG doctor review of
draft-ietf-softwire-yang-06. The
> > > > > > review focuses on YANG-specifics only, since I am not
familiar with
> > > > > > the technology that is modelled.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > o I would like to see all Tom Petch's comments in his three
replies
> > > > > > to the IETF LC for this document addressed. Especially
his
> > comment
> > > > > > about using ianatf:tunnel.
> > > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > [Med] This is fixed in -07. A new tunnel-type parameter is
defined
> > > > > to handle this.
> > > >
> > > > I think that the addition of identities for various tunnel types
that
> > > > derive from ift:tunnel is the right thing to do.
> > >
> > > [Med] OK, thanks
> > >
> > > >
> > > > However, since these identities derive from ift:tunnel, the
> > > > augmentation of ietf-interfaces in ietf-interface-tunnel is not
> > > > needed.
> > >
> > > [Med] ietf-interface-tunnel tries to preserve a similar structure
as
> > > in
> > https://www.iana.org/assignments/ianaiftype-mib/ianaiftype-mib, but
> > you are
> > right we can get rid of it.
> > >
> > > Instead, the new identities should be used as if:type
> > > > directly. For example, instead of:
> > > >
> > > > <interface
xmlns:ianaift="urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:iana-if-type">
> > > > <name>lw4o6-wan</name>
> > > > <type>ianaift:tunnel</type>
> > > > <tunnel-type
> > > >
xmlns:iana-tunnel-type="urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:iana-tunnel-
> > type">
> > > > iana-tunnel-type:aplusp
> > > > </tunnel-type>
> > > > ...
> > > > </interface>
> > > >
> > > > you should do:
> > > >
> > > > <interface>
> > > >
xmlns:iana-tunnel-type="urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:iana-tunnel-
> > type">
> > > > <name>lw4o6-wan</name>
> > > > <type>iana-tunnel-type:aplusp</type>
> > > > ...
> > > > </interface>
> > > >
> > > > So, I think you should remove the ietf-tunnel-type module.
> > > >
> > >
> > > [Med] OK.
> > >
> > > >
> > > > An additional comment on the identities in iana-tunnel-type; for
each
> > > > identity, I think you should add a "reference" statement that
points
> > > > to the RFC(s) that define the tunnel. (available in the IANA
registry
> > > > at
> > > >
https://www.iana.org/assignments/smi-numbers/smi-numbers.xhtml#smi-
> > numbers-5)
> > > >
> > >
> > > [Med] I guess you meant
> > > https://www.iana.org/assignments/smi-numbers/smi-
> > numbers.xhtml#smi-numbers-6. Fixed in my local copy, except form
> > IPHTTPS for
> > which we don't have an RFC.
> > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > > > o The term "instance" is used to mean - I think - the
"device".
> > > > >
> > > > > [Med] It is used to mean function rather than device. A device
may
> > > > > enable multiple instances of the same function.
> > > >
> > > > But you have for example in the description of "binding-mode":
> > > >
> > > > This feature indicates that the instance functions as a
binding
> > > > based softwire instance.
> > > >
> > > > And in container algo-instances you have:
> > > >
> > > > The instances advertise the MAP-E/MAP-T
> > > > feature through the capability exchange mechanism
> > > > when a NETCONF session is established."
> > > >
> > > > Unless your intentation is that one "instance" == one "function"
==
> > > > one NETCONF server, then this text is not correct.
> > > >
> > > > So I am a bit confused - if the device advertises the feature
> > > > "binding-mode" it means that "it functions as a binding based
softwire
> > > > instance". Maybe you mean something along the lines of
> > > >
> > > > This feature indicates that the network element can
function as
> > > > one or more binding based softwire instances.
> > > >
> > >
> > > [Med] This is it. Updates when appropriate.
> > >
> > > > (I don't know if you want to use the term "network element" or
> > > > something else.)
> > > >
> > >
> > > [Med] Network element is fine.
> > >
> > > >
> > > > Also there is similar text for the features map-e and map-t.
> > > >
> > > >
> > >
> > > [Med] Yes.
> > >
> > > > Anyway, if this meaning of the word "instance" is defined
somewhere,
> > > > I suggest you add a reference to that other doc; or else explain
this
> > > > meaning in 1.1.
> > > >
> > >
> > > [Med] added to the terminology section:
> > >
> > > A network element may support one or multiple instances of a
softwire
> > > mechanism; each of these instances may have its own
configuration and
> > > parameters.
> > >
> > > >
> > > > > I
> > > > > > didn't find this term in the RFCs 7596, 7597 or 7599. I
suggest
> > > > > > you use some other term, since "instance" is quite
generic, and is
> > > > > > often used to refer to instances of YANG data nodes.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Also, does the term "instance" mean the same thing in
> > > > > > "algo-instance"? And in "br-instances"?
"bind-instance"?
> > > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > [Med] algo-instance means an instance of type
> > > > > algorithm. br-instances denotes a set of br instances, and
> > > > > bind-instance means an instance of type binding.
> > > >
> > > > I could guess that. I think the issue is when the word
"instance" is
> > > > used unqualified.
> > >
> > > [Med] Updated to avoid unqualified "instances"
> > >
> > > >
> > > > > > o In ietf-softwire-common:
> > > > > >
> > > > > > grouping algorithm-instance {
> > > > > > description
> > > > > > "Indicates that the instance supports the MAP-E and
MAP-T
> > > > > > function. The instance advertises the MAP-E/MAP-T
feature
> > > > > > through the capability exchange mechanism when a
NETCONF
> > > > > > session is established.";
> > > > > >
> > > > > > This description does not seem right. A grouping can't
indicate
> > > > > > anything. Also, what is "the MAP-E/MAP-T feature"?
> > > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > [Med] Fixed.
> > > > >
> > > > > >
> > > > > > o In ietf-softwire-ce:
> > > > > >
> > > > > > A similar description is found here:
> > > > > >
> > > > > > container algo-instances {
> > > > > > description
> > > > > > "Indicates that the instances supports the MAP-E
and MAP-
> > T
> > > > > > function. The instances advertise the
MAP-E/MAP-T
> > > > > > feature through the capability exchange
mechanism
> > > > > > when a NETCONF session is established.";
> > > > > >
> > > > > > same comments apply.
> > > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > [Med] Fixed.
> > > >
> > > > This text is still present, with a minor change:
> > > >
> > > > container algo-instances {
> > > > description
> > > > "Indicates that the instances supports the MAP-E
and/or MAP-T
> > > > function. The instances advertise the MAP-E/MAP-T
> > > > feature through the capability exchange mechanism
> > > > when a NETCONF session is established.";
> > > >
> > > > But since the container "algo-instances" is a non-presence
container,
> > > > it can't "indicate" anything. This text needs to be rephrased.
> > > >
> > >
> > > [Med] Updated accordingly.
> > >
> > > >
> > > > > > o In ietf-softwire-common:
> > > > > >
> > > > > > container algo-versioning {
> > > > > > description "algorithm's version";
> > > > > > leaf version {
> > > > > > type uint64;
> > > > > > description "Incremental version number for the
algorithm";
> > > > > > }
> > > > > > leaf date {
> > > > > > type yang:date-and-time;
> > > > > > description "Timestamp to the algorithm";
> > > > > > }
> > > > > > }
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Maybe these descriptions are crystal clear to someone who
knows the
> > > > > > technology. If so, perhaps add a reference to help the
rest of us?
> > > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > [Med] This is used for logging purposes. A reference to
RFC7422 is
> > added.
> > > >
> > > > Ok. I still don't really understand how it is supposed to be
used.
> > > >
> > > > When you write "version number for the algorithm", do you mean
> > > > "version number for this algo-instance"?
> > >
> > > [Med] What is meant is:
> > >
> > > "Incremental version number for the mapping
> > > algorithm rules provided to the algorithm instance";
> > >
> > > An algorithm instance may be provided with mapping rules that may
> > > change in
> > time (for example, increase the size of the port set). When an abuse
> > party
> > presents an external IP address/port, the version of the algorithm
is
> > important because depending on the version, a distinct customer may
be
> > identified. The timestamp is used as a key to find the appropriate
> > algorithm
> > that was put into effect when an abuse occurred.
> > >
> > > Updated the description among these lines.
> > >
> > > >
> > > > These are config true leafs; should they be config false and
> > > > internally managed by the server?
> > >
> > > [Med] This can be generated by the server or set by an operator.
> > >
> > > If not, I suppose an operator can
> > > > set them to any suitable values? If so, what does "incremental
> > > > version number" really mean? Is the server supposed to reject a
value
> > > > that is not "incremental"?
> > >
> > > [Med] What is important is to have a unique version number, how is
set
> > > is
> > not important. Incremental seems to be straightforward, but one may
> > envisage
> > other ways to manage versions. I deleted "incremental".
> > >
> > > >
> > > > [...]
> > > >
> > > > > > Also, it seems each "instance" has a numerical id (the
key), but
> > > > > > also a name (a string). Maybe there are protocol-reasons
to do
> > > > > > this, but if not, did you consider using the "name" as key
instead?
> > > > > >
> > > > >
> > > > > [Med] id/name is inspired from how NAT instances are managed
(see
> > > > > RFC7659). The name is optional.
> > > >
> > > > Well, in MIBs instances are normally identified with integers
b/c of
> > > > how the protocol (SNMP) works. In YANG modules, we usually use
a
> > > > "name" that is a string to identify instances. With a string,
the
> > > > operator can choose meaningful names, and use them in other
leafrefs,
> > > > instead of having to remember how the names are mapped to
integers.
> > > >
> > > > (Compare ifIndex (MIB) w/ interface/name (YANG))
> > > >
> > > > So I suggest you use "name" as key.
> > >
> > > [Med] If you think this is better, I'm fine with that.
> > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > o I also note that you have changed the name of some lists
in -08,
> > > > e.g., list "bind-instance" is now list "bind-instances"
> > > > (plural). Another example is:
> > > >
> > > > +--rw algo-instances
> > > > +--rw algo-instances* [id]
> > > >
> > > > I think you should change these back to singluar; that's what
YANG
> > > > modules typically use.
> > > >
> > > >
> > >
> > > [Med] Actually, this was a comment from Tom. Perhaps, we
misunderstood
> > > it.
> > OK to change it back if this is the recommended practice.
> > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > /martin
> > >
>
