See inline. > On Aug 17, 2018, at 2:17 PM, Russ Housley <housley@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review result: Ready > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-alternativebackoff-ecn-09 > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review Date: 2018-08-17 > IETF LC End Date: 2018-08-28 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready > > > Major Concerns: > > None > > > Minor Concerns: > > Section 2: Please update the first paragraph to reference RFC 8174 > in addition to RFC 2119, as follows: > > The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT", > "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "NOT RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and > "OPTIONAL" in this document are to be interpreted as described in BCP > 14 [RFC2119] [RFC8174] when, and only when, they appear in all > capitals, as shown here. > > Section 12.1: Please add a normative reference to RFC 7926. Oops. This should say RFC 8174. > > > Nits: > > Abstract: s/RFC3168/RFC 3168/ > > Section 1: s/RFC8087 [RFC8087]/[RFC8087]/ > > Section 1 says: > > However, currently used loss-based congestion control mechanisms > cannot always utilise a bottleneck link well where there are short > queues. > > I stumbled on this sentence. Maybe it would read better if you said > that current mechanisms sometimes provides poor link utilization when > queues are short. > > Section 1: s/allow for short queues only/allow only for short queues/ > > Section 6: s/RFC3168 states/[RFC3168] states/ and > s/dropped packet [RFC3168]./dropped packet./ > > Section 6: s/the TCPM WG or IESG/the TCPM WG or the IESG/ > > Section 7" s/TCPM working group/TCPM Working Group/ or /TCPM WG/ > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@xxxxxxxx > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
