Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-6man-rfc6434-bis-09 Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani Review Date: 2018-07-16 IETF LC End Date: 2018-06-25 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: Ready with nits. Major issues: None. Minor issues: None. Nits/editorial comments: - S5.2: last paragraph, s/header can not/header cannot/ (I understand that technically these are similar, however, 'cannot' is preferred for more formal writing styles like the RFC series.) - S5.3: first paragraph, s/the processing of/the processing burden of/ - S5.3: second paragraph, s/if the more than/if more than/ - S14.3, second paragraph: s/In simple deployments,/In simple deployments/ - S14.3, third paragraph: s/complex deployment scenarios, such as/complex deployment scenarios such as/ (there are a number of places where such gratuitous commas are used, perhaps a good round of edit by the authors will eliminate these) - S15, last paragraph: s/it SHOULD want to/SHOULD/
