Reviewer: Pete Resnick
Review result: Ready with Issues
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Document: draft-ietf-ippm-twamp-yang-11
Reviewer: Pete Resnick
Review Date: 2018-06-19
IETF LC End Date: 2018-04-27
IESG Telechat date: 2018-06-21
Summary:
Ready with maybe Issues, but probably just Nits. Not my area of expertise by
any means, but the document looks generally solid. Could definitely use a bit
of copy editing.
Major issues:
None.
Minor issues:
I don't think there are any issues here. However, some of the things I've got
as Nits in the below section could amount to actual issues if I've
misunderstood what you meant. The editorial suggestions I give below should be
fine if they are nits, but do make sure that I haven't identified a real issue.
Nits/editorial comments:
3.1 - s/The test session name that MUST be identical/The test session name,
which MUST be identical (Unless you mean something really weird that I don't
think you mean. If you don't see the difference, then trust me, you mean
"which", not "that”.)