Hi Al, Thanks for addressing my comments, it looks good. Francesca > -----Original Message----- > From: MORTON, ALFRED C (AL) <acm@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> > Sent: den 23 maj 2018 15:39 > To: Francesca Palombini <francesca.palombini@xxxxxxxxxxxx>; gen- > art@xxxxxxxx > Cc: ippm@xxxxxxxx; ietf@xxxxxxxx; draft-ietf-ippm-2330-ipv6.all@xxxxxxxx > Subject: RE: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ippm-2330-ipv6-04 > > Hi Francesca, > one last item to resolve, we should be good now. > see below, > Al > > > -----Original Message----- > > From: Francesca Palombini [mailto:francesca.palombini@xxxxxxxxxxxx] > > Sent: Friday, April 27, 2018 3:44 AM > > To: MORTON, ALFRED C (AL) <acm@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>; gen-art@xxxxxxxx > > Cc: ippm@xxxxxxxx; ietf@xxxxxxxx; > > draft-ietf-ippm-2330-ipv6.all@xxxxxxxx > > Subject: RE: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ippm-2330-ipv6-04 > > > > Hi Al, > > > > Thanks for your reply. > > I cut selected parts of the email to detail some of my comments, see > > inline. > > > > Francesca > > > ...snip... > > > > To be consistent with the first bullet of the list above ("It > > > > includes a valid IP header: see below for version-specific > > > > criteria."), I would rephrase the text above with something on the lines > of: > > > > > > > > "For an IPvX (...) packet to be standard-formed, the IPvX-specific > > > > criteria for a valid IP header are:" > > > [acm] > > > Your wording suggestion dropped the clear indication of a requirement. > > > We are using the RFC2119 terms consistently for requirements. > > > > > > > I was trying to point out that the first part of the section (first > > bullet > > list) does not use RFC2119 terms. I read the second bullet list as a > > "sub- list" of the first one, which is why I was suggesting removing > > the REQUIRED term. Or you could rephrase the first list to use REQUIRED > too. > > Anyway, this is nit-picking. Feel free to disregard. > > > [acm] > I see your point now, and I changed the sentence introducing the initial (IP > version-agnostic list) to read: > > A packet is standard-formed if it meets all of the following REQUIRED criteria:
