Hi Stewart, I will let Pete or Charles address other comments. As to these: On 05.02.18 11:04, Stewart Bryant wrote: > A description of how reconsideration currently takes > place is found in <https://iaoc.ietf.org/meetings- > committee/documents/IETF-VenueSelectionID- > ContingencyPlanningFlowChart-2016.pdf>. > > SB> Maybe it is my finger trouble, but I could not access this > rather unfriendly multi-line URL. I get a 404 error, and when I > edit the URL to remove the %20s that show up in my browser > I get "authentication required". I confirm that this is a problem, and I have contacted the IAOC and AMSL to see what can be done about it. > Editorials/Nits: > > In the abstract the terms IASA and IAOC should be spelled out. This is part of > a wider problem of the various I* abbreviations that are scattered through the > text not being particularly user friendly. It would be helpful to the reader to > provide a small glossary early in the text. I would prefer that we not create a glossary. I will leave to the RFC Editor to help me on style with expansions, if that's okay. > > ==== > > o It MUST be possible to provision Internet Access to the Facility > and IETF Hotels that allows local attendees to utilize the > SB> When I first read this I though you meant local as in those > SB> who live in the country, but I think you mean those at the facility. > SB> Clarification may be useful. I think this becomes clear in the following sentence. > > ==== > > o There are sufficient places (e.g., a mix of hallways, bars, > meeting rooms, and restaurants) for people to hold ad hoc > conversations and group discussions in the combination of spaces > offered by the facilities, hotels and bars/restaurants in the > surrounding area, within walking distance (5-10'). > > SB> I imagine you mean 5-10 minutes not 5-10 feet. I've expanded this out in my working copy. > > ==== > > o Overflow Hotels can be placed under contract, within convenient > travel time of the Facility and at a variety of guest room rates. > SB> s/of/to and from/ > Ok. These changes are in my working copy. Whether there will be a new version prior to proceeding to the RFC Editor is not my call but the AD's. In any case, I will see that they are addressed. Eliot
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