> On Jul 11, 2017, at 00:15, Vijay Gurbani <vijay.gurbani@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: > > Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your > document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-turner-est-extensions-?? > Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani > Review Date: 2017-07-10 > IETF LC End Date: 2017-07-11 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat > > Summary: Ready with nits. > > Major issues: 0 > > Minor issues: 1 > > Nits/editorial comments: 2 > > Minor: > - S2, I understand that a PAL may be represented as a XML file or a JSON > object, but I note that the underlying semantic content of the resource, > irrespective of representation as shown in Sections 2.1.2 and 2.1.3 is > different. I suspect that is by design, but could not figure out why the > XML and JSON resource would have different semantic content. s2.1.2 is XML schema. There’s no schema in JSON so that’s why there a little different. > Nits: > - S1, top of page 5: What is TA? The expansion is not defined before being > used here for the first time; I suspect it is "Trust Anchor", but may help > to expand it here rather than in S7. TA = Trust Anchor - it’s expanded on p4 in the /crls bullet. ;) > - S1.1, "air gap" --- I understand what it means from rfc4949, but someone > not familiar (or too lazy to look up rfc4949 or simply much too younger than > us) may assume that "air gap" refers to "wifi". Admittedly in 2007 when > rfc4949 was written, 802.11{g,e,n} were just released [1], and only three > years before, in 2004, Economist predicted that the worldwide market for WiFi > devices in 2006 will be 50 million (!) [2]. > > I don't know that we can do much here, but it was with some chuckle that > the term "air gap" lead me to the statistics I mention above. Yeah I wondered whether people would know what that was, but I could put in an reference reference to 4949 to make sure people know what I mean. spt > [1] http://www.ucopia.com/en/news/history-of-wi-fi/ > [2] http://www.economist.com/node/2724397 > > >