Reviewer: Rich Salz Review result: Has Nits The term "ufrag" should be explained, or at least have a reference on its first use. It seems important :) I think the "fingerprint" reference should be moved up to the bullet list in section 4, from the bullet list in 5.1 Sec 4 uses the term "cryptographic random function" which is not a common security term. (See https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cryptographically_secure_pseudorandom_number_generator) I would just say "strong random function"; it's the number of random bits that counts. Or use CSPRNG as the term. In Sec 9, it seems like quoting all the old text is way too verbose. I would just say "replace with the following NEW TEXT" If it's not replacing an entire section, then say "the nnn paragraphs starting with xxxxx" or similar construct.