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Document: draft-ietf-regext-epp-rdap-status-mapping-01
Reviewer: Robert Sparks
Review Date: 5 Oct 2016
IETF LC End Date: 10 Oct 2016
IESG Telechat date: 13 Oct 2016
Summary: This draft is on the right track but has open issues, described
in the review.
Major Issue:
Many of the descriptions describe only side-effects of the status
instead of the status itself.
All of the descriptions for the new rdap status codes start with "For
DNR that indicates". This implies that there is a "For not DNR" case
that's not discussed. I don't think the phrase is necessary and each
description should look more like the other descriptions already
registered at
http://www.iana.org/assignments/rdap-json-values/rdap-json-values.xhtml.
For instance, at 'auto renew period' the document currently says:
"For DNR that indicates if the object is deleted by the registrar during
this period, the registry provides a credit to the registrar for the
cost of the auto renewal"
That discusses something (and not the only thing) that can happen while
the object is in that state. It does not describe the state.
I suggest it should instead say (based on the text in 3915 and the
current registry entry style):
"The object instance is in a grace period provided between when its
registration period expires and when its registration is automatically
renewed by the registry."
I don't think it's important to include the commentary about providing a
credit if the entity is deleted by the registrar during this period, but
since that commentary exists in 3915, you can include it if you want.
The _important_ part to convey is the actual status.
All of the descriptions will need similar attention. Some of them (such
as clientUpdateProhibited) currently have 2119 words in the description.
That doesn't make sense - this is a status, not an protocol instruction,
and trying to put normative language in a registry will lead to
confusion about where the behavior you are trying to describe is
actually defined. (To be fair, 5731 has this same problem). Again, I
suggest following the style that's already in the registry and say
something like "The client has requested that any requests to update
this object instance be rejected."
Minor Issues:
You're setting up a minor maintenance headache for any future work that
might update this document by having the descriptions listed in two
places. I don't think it's necessary to list the descriptions in section
2 (currently the bulk of page 4 and the beginning of page 5). Instead,
stop after the paragraph that ends at the top of page 4, and note that
the descriptions of each new status code are provided in section 3.
Nits:
Near the end of page 3, the document says "In the DNR, the client and
server prohibited statuses are separate an RDAP MUST support the same
separation." There are several nits to address with this. That MUST is
not a good use of 2119. DNR hasn't been expanded (and "the DNR" is not
particularly clear).
I suggest you replace that sentence, and the one immediately before it with:
"EPP provides status codes that allow distinguishing the case that an
action is prohibited because of server policy from the case that an
action is prohibited because of a client request. The ability to make
this distinction needs to be preserved in RDAP."