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Hi Pete, Thanks for the review. Please see inline From: Pete Resnick [mailto:presnick@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx]
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area For more information, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq. Document: draft-ietf-tram-turn-mobility-03 Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has some minor issues and nits that should be fixed before publication. Major issues: None Minor issues: 3.1.2 - Change "MUST" to "will" both times in the second paragraph. The last sentence of the section I don't understand; it doesn't seem to have any interoperability implications, and I don't see why the client can't examine the ticket in any way it wants.
Either justify the sentence or delete it. [TR] Even if the client examines the ticket there is no guarantee that it will be able decode its fields. This line is added to suggest that there is no need for the client to
examine the ticket. 3.2.2 - Change "may" to "MAY" in the sixth paragraph. That is a protocol option being described there. [TR] Updated. Nits/editorial comments: 3.1.4 - Change "MAY" to "can" in the second paragraph. I'd also split that sentence into two sentences as the first half has nothing to do with the second half. [TR] Changed. 3.2.1 - The last sentence of 3.2.1 is confusing until you read 3.2.2 and 3.2.3. I would simply delete the sentence. I don't think it adds anything. [TR] Sure, deleted. 3.4 - Put the "TBD" in there so that the RFC Editor can update. [TR] Added. 4 - Put a note to the RFC Editor here to update sections 3.1.4 and 3.4 with the error number. That will make sure it gets updated properly. [TR] Yes, updated. -Tiru pr http://www.qualcomm.com/~presnick/ |