Thanks for your review, Russ. For what it is worth, I do not see any changes relating to your comments in the -07. Have you authors seen Russ’ comments? Jari On 17 Apr 2015, at 18:25, Russ Housley <housley@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > This review is in response to a request for early Gen-ART review. > > Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-mofrr-06 > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review Date: 2015-04-17 > IETF LC End Date: 2015-04-30 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Almost Ready > > > Major Concerns: > > None > > > Minor Concerns: > > Please add POP to the list of terms in Section 1.2. > > The introduction to Section 6 really only talks about Section 6.1. > Perhaps Sections 6 and 6.1 should be merged. If they are merged, it > could look like this: > > 6. MoFRR Applicability to Dual-Plane Topology > > MoFRR applicability is topology dependent. The applicability is the > same as LFA FRR which is discussed in [RFC6571]. > > MoFRR works best in dual-planes topologies as illustrated in the > figures below. MoFRR may be enabled on any router in the network. > In the figures below, MoFRR is shown enabled on the Provider Edge > (PE) routers to illustrate one way in which the technology may be > deployed. > > . . . > > If this suggestion is taken, Sections 6.2, 6.3, and 6.4 could become > top-level sections of their own. > > > Other Comments: > > The figures are referenced in many ways: FIG3, Fig3, and Fig 3. > Please pick one style and use it throughout the document. > > Section 1, 2nd paragraph: add a period at the end of the paragraph. > > Section 1.2, LFA definition: add a period after the first sentence. > > Section 4, intro paragraph: Delete " See below;" from the end. > > Section 5, 1st paragraph: s/section explore some/section explores some/ >
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