Hi David, On Sun, Jun 9, 2013 at 1:47 PM, Black, David <david.black@xxxxxxx> wrote: > The -03 version of this draft resolves all of the concerns raised by > the Gen-ART review of the -02 version. Thanks. > Unfortunately, a serious typo/thinko snuck into the -03 version (been > there, done that, myself). Section 3.2 currently says: > > 00-42 is a protocol number under the IANA OUI (that is, > 00-00-0E-00-42) to be used for documentation purposes. > > The parenthetical expansion of the protocol number is incorrect. > The correct expansion uses -5E- instead of -0E-: My apologies, you are correct. However, I believe that, in context, the typo is pretty obvious. > 00-42 is a protocol number under the IANA OUI (that is, > 00-00-5E-00-42) to be used for documentation purposes. > > I strongly suggest submitting a -04 version of this draft to make > the necessary single character correction (e.g., as opposed to using > a RFC Editor Note for that purpose). I defer entirely to JoelJaeggli, the sponsoring AD. I'd be happy to submit a -04 or it seems to me it could easily be fixed with an RFC Editor Note or at AUTH48 time. (Actually, it seems likely to me that during IESG consideration, some other change will be decided on and this can be fixed at the same time.) Thanks, Donald ============================= Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) 155 Beaver Street, Milford, MA 01757 USA d3e3e3@xxxxxxxxx > Thanks, > --David > >> -----Original Message----- >> From: Black, David >> Sent: Wednesday, June 05, 2013 6:13 PM >> To: d3e3e3@xxxxxxxxx; joe.abley@xxxxxxxxx; General Area Review Team >> Cc: Black, David; joelja@xxxxxxxxx; ietf@xxxxxxxx >> Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-eastlake-rfc5342bis-02 >> >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >> >> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >> >> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments >> you may receive. >> >> Document: draft-eastlake-rfc5342bis-02 >> Reviewer: David L. Black >> Review Date: June 5, 2013 >> IETF LC End Date: June 4, 2013 >> >> Summary: >> This draft is on the right track but has open issues, described in the review. >> >> This draft updates the IANA registered Ethernet parameters for IETF use, >> including recording values assigned for documentation. It also makes some >> minor changes to IANA procedures. >> >> IANA should review this entire draft, not just its IANA Considerations >> section; >> Pearl Liang appears to have done that comprehensive review for IANA. >> >> Major issues: None >> >> Minor issues: One, the IANA review also found this issue. >> >> Section 3.2 states: >> >> IANA will assign "00-00-0E-00-42" as the protocol number under the >> IANA OUI to be used for documentation purposes. >> >> IANA has not made this assignment, but this assignment request is not >> recorded in the IANA Considerations section where IANA actions are >> requested and recorded by IANA after they have been performed. This >> assignment needs to be added to the IANA Considerations section; >> see item 5 in the IANA review. >> >> Nits/editorial comments: >> >> Section 1: This document uses an "IESG Ratification" process for some >> assignments. This is not the same process as the "IESG Approval" process >> defined in RFC 5226. As those names could be confused by a casual reader >> who is not strongly familiar with IANA processes, I suggest adding a >> statement that the "IESG Ratification" process is defined in this document >> and is not the same as the "IESG Approval" process in RFC 5226. This could >> be added after the sentence that cites RFC 5226. >> >> Section 1.4: It would be helpful to point out that there is no OUI assigned >> for documentation purposes, but there are identifiers based on the IANA OUI >> that have been assigned for documentation purposes. >> >> In general, the use of the acronym IAB for Individual Address Block is >> unfortunate, but unavoidable, and this is clearly pointed out in the >> definition of the IAB acronym in section 1.2. Nothing can or should be >> done about this. >> >> idnits 2.12.17 did not find any nits. >> >> Thanks, >> --David >> ---------------------------------------------------- >> David L. Black, Distinguished Engineer >> EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 >> +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 >> david.black@xxxxxxx Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 >> ---------------------------------------------------- >