Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ancp-pon-02

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Sorry for the late review due to IET meeting.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

 

Document: draft-ietf-ancp-pon-02

Reviewer: Roni Even

Review Date:2012–4–1

IETF LC End Date: 2012–3–30

IESG Telechat date:

 

Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC.

 

Major issues:

 

Minor issues:

 

Nits/editorial comments:

 

In section 4 ”However, the broadcast capability on the PON enables the AN (OLT) to send one copy on the PON as opposed to N  copies of a multicast channel on the PON serving N premises being  receivers” I think the “being” before the last word should be deleted

 

General editorial comment is about page breaks which can be better like section 7 title is at the end of a page and the text is in the next page. Also some of the figures and their descriptions are split between pages.

 


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