Gen-ART LC Review of draft-ietf-mpls-rsvp-te-no-php-oob-mapping-08

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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-rsvp-te-no-php-oob-mapping
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2011-08-12
IETF LC End Date: 2011-08-12

Summary: This document is almost ready for publication as a proposed standard. There are a few editorial issues and nits that should be considered prior to publication.


Major issues:

None

Minor issues:

None

Nits/editorial comments:

-- Please proofread for missing articles (i.e. a, an, the)

-- idnits reports some issues, please check.

-- section 1:

It would be helpful to include an explicit definition of " non-Penultimate Hop Popping behavior" somewhere in the introduction.

-- section 1, paragraph 2: "P2MP"

Please expand on first mention. I see you did in the abstract, but it should be redone in the body.

-- section 2.2, last paragraph: "w.r.t."

Please spell out

-- section 3: First paragraph: " Addition of "non-PHP behavior" adds a variable of attacks on the label assigned by the Egress node. "

Is "variable" the correct word?

-- IANA Considerations:

Please include the explicit names of the registry to be changed.

-- 6.1, "[RFC 2119]"

The space between RFC and 2119 confused idnits, and may confuse other tools.

-- 6.1, [RFC5920]

This is an informational draft. Does the reference need to be normative?

-- general:

I am unable to read the title without thinking of this: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hop_on_Pop  :-)
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