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Document: draft-ietf-lisp-lig-04
Reviewer: Mary Barnes
Review Date: 10 August 2011
IETF LC End Date: 12 August 2011
Summary: Ready with comments/nits
Comments/minor issues:
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- Section 3, Routing Locator definition: The third sentence is a little difficult to parse. I would suggest to reword something like the following (based on my interpretation of what the text is intended to say):
OLD:
Typically, RLOCs are
numbered from topologically-aggregatable blocks that are assigned
to a site at each point to which it attaches to the global
Internet; where the topology is defined by the connectivity of
provider networks, RLOCs can be thought of as PA addresses.
NEW:
Typically, RLOCs are
numbered from topologically-aggregatable blocks that are assigned
to a site at each point to which it attaches to the global
Internet. Thus, the topology is defined by the connectivity of
provider networks and RLOCs can be thought of as PA addresses.
Also, you'll have to pardon my ignorance, but it's not obvious to me what PA stands for. I googled and I think it's Provider Aggregatable (and not Physical Address, which was my first reaction). I also found it expanded in draft-lisp-eid-block, which has a definition of RLOC that is mostly verbatim to this one, which makes me wonder why the terms need to be redefined in this document and isn't there the potential for the definitions to become inconsistent?
- Section 3, Endpoint ID definition. It's not clear to me how SIP relates to LISP. I would think it's sufficient to use a DNS lookup as the example and delete the non-specific reference to a "SIP Exchange".
Nits:
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- Section 2, 2nd paragraph: "Map Resolvers" -> "Map-Resolvers"
- Section 3, 2nd bullet: "Map Replier" -> "Map-Replier"
- Section 3, last paragraph: "for lig initiating site" -> "for the lig initiating site"
- Section 3, last paragraph: shouldn't "lig self" be "ligging yourself"?
- Section 4.1, last paragraph before sample output for ligging yourself:
"to originating site" -> "to the originating site"
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