Gen-ART LC/Tekechat Review of draft-ietf-geopriv-loc-filters-10

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Document: draft-ietf-geopriv-loc-filters-10
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 9 March 2010
IESG Telechat date: 11 March 2010


Note: Since the IETF LC end-date and the telechat are only a day apart, I intend for this review to serve for both purposes.

Summary: 

This draft is almost ready for publication as a proposed standard, but there are issues that should be addressed first.

Major issues:

-- section 3.6, general:

As far as I can tell, this section creates a profile of the rate-control draft. You basically say use pieces of it, but make minor modifications to the normative requirements. Can you motivate why rate-control does not work as-is? And if it can't, perhaps this draft and that one should be harmonized prior to publication?

-- section 3.6, 2nd paragraph:

The empty notify language seems to conflict with the MUST level normative statement in rate-control that says:

> depending on the event package and subscriber
>    preferences indicated in the SUBSCRIBE request, the NOTIFY request
>    MUST contain either the current full state or the partial state
>    showing the difference between the current state and the last
>    successfully communicated state.
> 

Is it your intent to update rate-control to change this requirement? If so, it would be good to do so prior to publication of that draft. (see previous comment)



Minor issues:

-- general:

Some of the filter mechanisms in this draft require a lot of calculations for every candidate update to determine if it matches a filter.  It would be useful to have some discussion of the scalability impacts of this.

-- Section 1, paragraph 1, last sentence:

I assume their persistence ends when the associated subscription ends, right?

-- Section 3.2, first paragraph after figure 2:

It looks you've effectively declared the example as normative, and skipped over normative text that needs to be here. I find the "No other variant…" language confusing in context, as it's not clear to me what restriction in the example is constraining on <ns-binding>. I think you're better off treating the examples as informative, and fully defining the normative requirements in words. (Note that this applies for several instances where you say something to the effect of "an implementation MUST do FOO according to Figure X".)


-- section 3.6, first paragraph:

Why is average-rate left out? If you are going to suggest using just part of a previously defined mechanism, it would be nice to show motivation for the parts left out.

-- section 3.6, last paragraph:

I think you need more motivation for this use case. I _think_ you are referring to situations where, for example, a location service can give you increasing precision over time, and you want to say "give me the best you can in X seconds." But I'm afraid this could be misused in situations where the notifier requires some period of time to get _any_ information.

It would be helpful to have some comment on how filters interact with rate-control for location. For example, what happens if I have a max-interval that expires before a filter has been met? A trigger that fires before the min-interval expires? (I think the answer is that rate-control wins, but some text would be helpful.)


Nits/editorial comments:

-- General: 

I find the organization of this draft confusing. It would be helpful to have a clearer distinction between text that creates new mechanism or normative requirements, and text that describes how you can use existing mechanism. I think it would be easier to read if you separated new mechanism and usage of existing mechanisms into separate sections.

-- section 1, paragraph 1:

Please expand PIDF-LO on first mention. The expansion in the abstract doesn't count--the document should stand alone without the abstract.

s/technical/technically

"…alternative signaling approach…"  - Alternative to what? This wording makes it sound like sip-events is an alternative to 4119, which I don't think is what you mean to say.


-- Section 1, paragraph 2:

Do you mean to say "[the subscriber] not having to receive…", or "without the notifier having to issue…"?

-- section 1, numbered list and preceding paragraph:

The list does not seem to follow from the preceding paragraph. That paragraph leads me to expect a list of mechanisms, and I think what I see is a list of problems to be solved.

-- section 3.6, first paragraph:

 Please clarify--do you mean "the implementation of only two attributes is required", i.e. you must not implement more than the two attributes, or "only the implementation of two attributes is required", meaning you don't have to implement more than the two attributes.



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