[Last-Call] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-core-cf-reg-update-04

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Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-core-cf-reg-update-04
Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review Date: 2025-02-26
IETF LC End Date: 2025-03-10
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: The document updates and clarifies the procedures for registering CoAP
Content-Formats, is well written and easy to understand. However, I have one
editorial comment that I would like the authors to address.

Major issues: N/A

Minor issues: N/A

Nits/editorial comments:

It is a little confusing when the updates to RFC 7252 are in the IANA
Considerations section of the document. In addition, new procedures are added
in Sections 5.1 and 5.2, but those should be new 12.3 subsections in RFC 7252.

I suggest to have a dedicated "Updates to RFC 7252" section, where the text in
Sections 5.1 and Sections 5.2 are also added as new Sections 12.3.1 and
Sections 12.3.2 to RFC 7252.

For example:

----

4. Updates to RFC 7252

This Section updates Section 12.3, and adds the new Sections 12.3.1 and 12.3.2,
to [RFC7252].

4.1. Updates to Section 12.3

// The text in Section 5

4.2. New Section 12.3.1

// The text in Section 5.1

4.2. New Section 12.3.2

// The text in Section 5.2

----

The Security Considerations then become Section 5. The IANA Considerations
become Section 6, and there you only need to state something like:

"This document updates the IANA procedures of [RFC7252] for registering CoAP
Content-Formats."



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