Hi Peter, Thanks for the very detailed review and also for forcing me to learn proper use of a comma in if-then conditional statements :-) I uploaded -18 to address the comments. > Page 11, 1st (really long) indented paragraph: I find it odd to use code 8. > Considering the definition of this code in RFC 8883, I’d almost feel that an > update is needed to that RFC to expand the definition. As it, the definition is > just being stretched and appropriated here. Understanding that this is an > Informational specification, it might not be appropriate to make such an update > strictly from this document, so I’ll just leave my point out there. For this, I changed it to use the catchall code 0 (Erroneous Header Field Encountered) Tom > > Page 11, 1st non-indented paragraph: change “an” to “on”. > > Page 11, 1st bullet item: append a comma after “Options”. > > Page 12, 2nd bullet item, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “limit”. > > Page 12, 3rd bullet item, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “the limit”. > Insert “the” before “length limit”. > > Page 12, 3rd bullet item, 3rd sentence: change the comma after “exceeded” to a > semicolon. Append a comma after “however”. > > Page 12, 4th bullet item, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “received”. (I > believe it’s still appropriate in the if-then construction here.) Append a > comma after “padding” > > Page 12, 4th bullet item, 3rd sentence: change the comma after “exceeded” to a > semicolon. Append a comma after “however”. > > Page 13, 1st bullet item, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “router”. > > Page 13, 1st bullet item, 3rd sentence: change the comma after “exceeded” to a > semicolon. Append a comma after “however”. > > Page 13, section 7, 2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence: change “MTU sized” to > “MTU-sized”. > > Page 13, section 7, 2nd paragraph, last sentence: change “MTU sized” to > “MTU-sized”. Change “minimal sized” to “minimal-sized”. > > Page 13, section 7, 3rd paragraph, 2nd sentence: insert “and” before > “intermediate”. > > Page 14, 1st paragraph, last sentence: purely a suggestion: insert > “independently” before “set”. > > Page 16, section A.2, 1st sentence: delete the first “limit”. Insert a hyphen > into “104 byte”. > > Page 17, 1st non-indented paragraph, last sentence: change both occurrences of > “128 byte” to “128-byte”. Change “192 byte” to “192-byte”. Change “64 byte” to > “64-byte”. > > Page 17, 2nd non-indented paragraph, 1st sentence: change “128 byte” to > “128-byte”. > > Page 17, 2nd non-indented paragraph, 2nd sentence: change “128 byte” to > “128-byte”. Insert “a” before “104”. Insert a hyphen between that “104” and the > following “byte”. > > Page 17, 2nd non-indented paragraph, 3rd sentence: change “32 byte” to > “32-byte”. Change “64 bytes” to “64-byte” (not the dropping of “s”). > > Page 17, 1st phrase before bullet items: change “128 byte” to “128-byte”. > > Page 17, 4th bullet item: append a comma after “i.e.”. > > Page 18, 1st non-indented paragraph, 3rd sentence: delete “does”. > > Page 18, section A.4, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: change “Open ended” to > “Open-ended”. > > Page 18, section A.4, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: change “well defined” to > “well-defined”. > > Page 18, section A.4, 3rd paragraph, 2nd sentence: insert “in” before > “performance”. Change “is” to “could be”. Insert “a” before “Denial”. > > Page 18, section A.4, 4th paragraph, 1st sentence: change “out of order” to > “out-of-order”. > > > -- last-call mailing list -- last-call@xxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to last-call-leave@xxxxxxxx
