Reviewer: Adrian Farrel Review result: Has Nits Hi, I have reviewed this document during IETF last call as part of the Routing Directorate. The comments are principally for the benefit of the Routing ADs, but it may be sensible to take them as IETF last call comments and apply fixes or discuss them with me. The document is a simple update to RFC 3376 to include some fixes, mainly arising from Errata Reports. The changes have been clearly applied (with the exception of 1501 and 7339 as mentioned below). The applicability of this work to routing are clear and need no further work. My comments are all editorial in nature, although the first one applies to the metadata and so has slightly more weight. Cheers, Adrian === Per Errata Reports 1501 and 7339, shouldn't the document header say "Updates: 2236 (if approved)" And the Abstract and Introduction explain why/how this is an update? --- The Abstract is a little confusing about whether this is a revision to IGMPv3 (which would not be IGMPv3) or just a revised version of the specification. I think that this document specifies IGMPv3, so you need to say: - This document specifies IGMPv3 - It is a revised version of the specificaltion to include clarifications and fixes for errata in RFC 3376 - It obsoletes RFC 3376 - It backward compatible with the specification included in RFC 3376 I would begin the Abstract with the three sentences that describe IGMP and IGMPv3. Then I would have a second para to describe this document. --- 1. A much better approach than the Abstract. No mention of a revision of 3376, just a specification of IGMPv3. However: a. The statement of obsoleting 3376 is too terse. You need to: - Give a brief statement of why/how - Point to Appendix C for the details b. The BCP 14 boilerplate is very out of date. You need to use the most recent version. It is also customary to put this in its own section (such as 1.1). --- 13. I-D.ietf-pim-3228bis should be a normative reference. --- Appendix C No mention of Errata Report 7339? -- last-call mailing list -- last-call@xxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to last-call-leave@xxxxxxxx
