Reviewer: Tommy Pauly Review result: Almost Ready This is a review of draft-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile for INTDIR (https://datatracker.ietf.org/group/intdir/about/) Overall, the document does need an editorial pass for clarity, and typos/grammar. Much of this can and should be done by the RFC editor, but it did make it a bit difficult to read. I’ve included some obvious nits at the bottom of this review, but a more thorough pass is needed. The abstract refers to “an IPv4 or IPv6 Enterprise information system environment”. However, I don’t see “Enterprise information system environment” defined or referred to elsewhere. I would suggest either elaborating on this term of art, or potentially simplifying it to “an IPv4 or IPv6 enterprise network”. The introduction (section 1) does not discuss enterprise networks at all, or give context on what this document itself is about. It provides background, which is fine as an introduction sub-section, but I would suggest that the content of the “problem statement” section 4 be moved up to the start of the introduction. Beyond readability and clarity, I don’t see particular issues with regards to the INTDIR review criteria; the handling of IPv4/IPv6, NAT, multicast, etc, seem appropriate. Nits: Section 1 “in stead” -> “instead” Section 6 typo on “aloted” -> “allotted” “Ipv6” -> “IPv6” -- last-call mailing list -- last-call@xxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to last-call-leave@xxxxxxxx
