Hello, Thanks for the review. We have published a new version (-17) to address the issues. Some comments below. Let us know any further comment. Best regards, Authors SCHC over Sigfox draft > On Dec 13, 2022, at 4:59 PM, Behcet Sarikaya via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx> wrote: > > Reviewer: Behcet Sarikaya > Review result: Almost Ready > > MIME-Version: 1.0 > Date: Mon, 12 Dec 2022 11:02:00 -0600 > Reply-To: sarikaya@xxxxxxxx > Message-ID: <CAC8QAcd+k0f1dqnPYkmBBt9L19ATyhhxQAn6kXHXrorrVVWdtg@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx> > Subject: IoT Draft Review Comments <draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-sigfox-16.txt> > From: Behcet Sarikaya <sarikaya2012@xxxxxxxxx> > To: iot-dir@xxxxxxxx, draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-sigfox@xxxxxxxx, > "Eric Vyncke (evyncke)" <evyncke@xxxxxxxxx>, lp-wan <lp-wan@xxxxxxxx>, lpwan-chairs@xxxxxxxx > Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary="0000000000007c69df05efa47694" > > --0000000000007c69df05efa47694 > Content-Type: text/plain; charset="UTF-8" > > I am the assigned IoT Directorate reviewer for this draft. The Directorate > aims to review IETF documents related with IoT (Internet of Things). Please > treat these comments just like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see > > https://trac.ietf.org/trac/int/wiki/IOTDirWiki. > https://datatracker.ietf.org/group/iotdir/about/ > > Document:draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-sigfox-16.txt > > Reviewer:Behcet Sarikaya > > Review Date:2022-12-12 > > IETF Review End Date:2022-12-1-20 > > IESG Telechat date: (if known) > > Summary: > > Major issues:None > > Minor issues:Yes > > Nits/editorial comments:Yes > > In Introduction > > Base Stations then forward messages to the Sigfox Cloud infrastructure for > further processing and final delivery to the customer > > > What about receiving from cloud? (technical coverage of the cloud could be > improved) > We have added extra information in the introduction. > In 3.6.1.3.1 > > Section Section 3.7.1 > > Section Section 4.1 > > Many places afterwards same repeated Section references > We have remove the extra “section” in all places. > In Section 3.1 > > Figure 1 NGW is referenced as Network Gateway, Sigfox Network, cloud-based > Sigfox Core Network > > suggest Network Gateway (NGW) > We have modified to Network Gateway in Figure 1. > Section 8.1 > > RFC 3967 says IETF procedures generally require that a standards track RFC > may not > > have a normative reference to another standards track document at a > lower maturity level or to a non standards track specification > > refers to SCHC Compound Ack reference? > Both documents are together, as the SCHC Compound ACK draft was part of this document, but was adopted as a separate I.D. > --0000000000007c69df05efa47694 > Content-Type: text/html; charset="UTF-8" > Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable > > <div dir=3D"ltr"><p dir=3D"auto" style=3D"font-size:16px;box-sizing:border-= > box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-appl= > e-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe UI","Noto Sans",Helv= > etica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji","Segoe UI Emoji&q= > uot;">I am the assigned IoT Directorate reviewer for this draft. The Direct= > orate aims to review IETF documents related with IoT (Internet of Things). = > Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.</p><p d= > ir=3D"auto" style=3D"font-size:16px;box-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;ma= > rgin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSyst= > emFont,"Segoe UI","Noto Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-seri= > f,"Apple Color Emoji","Segoe UI Emoji"">For more inform= > ation, please see</p><p dir=3D"auto" style=3D"font-size:16px;box-sizing:bor= > der-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-= > apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe UI","Noto Sans",= > Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji","Segoe UI Emo= > ji""><a href=3D"https://trac.ietf.org/trac/int/wiki/IOTDirWiki"; rel=3D= > "nofollow" style=3D"box-sizing:border-box;text-decoration:none">https://tra= > c.ietf.org/trac/int/wiki/IOTDirWiki</a>.<span class=3D"gmail-Apple-converte= > d-space">=C2=A0</span><a 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"Noto Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji&qu= > ot;,"Segoe UI Emoji"">Review Date:2022-12-12</p><p dir=3D"auto" s= > tyle=3D"font-size:16px;box-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:1= > 6px;color:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"= > Segoe UI","Noto Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple= > Color Emoji","Segoe UI Emoji"">IETF Review End Date:2022-12= > -1-20</p><p dir=3D"auto" style=3D"font-size:16px;box-sizing:border-box;marg= > in-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-apple-system= > ,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe UI","Noto Sans",Helvetica,Ar= > ial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji","Segoe UI Emoji"">IE= > SG Telechat date: (if known)</p><p dir=3D"auto" style=3D"font-size:16px;box= > -sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);fo= > nt-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe UI","Noto = > Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji","S= > egoe UI Emoji"">Summary:</p><p dir=3D"auto" style=3D"font-size:16px;bo= > x-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);f= > ont-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe UI","Noto= > Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji","= > Segoe UI Emoji"">Major issues:None</p><p dir=3D"auto" style=3D"font-si= > ze:16px;box-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(3= > 6,41,47);font-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe UI",= > "Noto Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji&qu= > ot;,"Segoe UI Emoji"">Minor issues:Yes</p><p dir=3D"auto" style= > =3D"font-size:16px;box-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;= > color:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Sego= > e UI","Noto Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Col= > or Emoji","Segoe UI Emoji"">Nits/editorial comments:Yes</p><= > p style=3D"box-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rg= > b(36,41,47);font-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe UI&quo= > t;,"Noto Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji= > ","Segoe UI Emoji""><span style=3D"font-family:"Courier= > New";color:black">In Introduction</span></p><p class=3D"MsoNormal" st= > yle=3D"margin:0in;font-size:medium;font-family:Calibri,sans-serif;color:rgb= > (0,0,0)"><span style=3D"font-size:10pt;font-family:"Courier New""= >> Base Stations then forward messages to the Sigfox</span><span class=3D"gma= > il-Apple-converted-space" style=3D"font-family:"Courier New";font= > -size:10pt">=C2=A0</span><span style=3D"font-family:"Courier New"= > ;font-size:10pt">Cloud infrastructure for further processing and final deli= > very to the</span><span class=3D"gmail-Apple-converted-space" style=3D"font= > -family:"Courier New";font-size:10pt">=C2=A0</span><span style=3D= > "font-family:"Courier New";font-size:10pt">customer</span></p><p = > class=3D"MsoNormal" style=3D"margin:0in;font-size:medium;font-family:Calibr= > i,sans-serif;color:rgb(0,0,0)"><span style=3D"font-family:"Courier New= > ";font-size:10pt"><br></span></p><p class=3D"MsoNormal" style=3D"margi= > n:0in;font-size:medium;color:rgb(0,0,0)"><span style=3D"font-size:10pt"><fo= > nt face=3D"monospace">What about=C2=A0receiving=C2=A0from cloud? (technical= > coverage of the cloud could be improved)</font></span></p><p style=3D"box-= > sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);fon= > t-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe UI","Noto S= > ans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji","Se= > goe UI Emoji""><span style=3D"font-family:"Courier New";colo= > r:black">In 3.6.1.3.1=C2=A0</span></p><p style=3D"box-sizing:border-box;mar= > gin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-apple-syste= > m,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe UI","Noto Sans",Helvetica,A= > rial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji","Segoe UI Emoji""><= > span style=3D"font-family:"Courier New";color:black">Section Sect= > ion 3.7.1</span><br></p><p style=3D"box-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;ma= > rgin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSyst= > emFont,"Segoe UI","Noto Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-seri= > f,"Apple Color Emoji","Segoe UI Emoji""><span style=3D"= > font-size:10pt;font-family:"Courier New";color:black">Section Sec= > tion 4.1<span class=3D"gmail-Apple-converted-space">=C2=A0</span></span><sp= > an style=3D"color:rgb(0,0,0);font-family:-webkit-standard;font-size:medium"= >> </span><span style=3D"font-family:"Courier New";color:black"><br= >> </span></p><p style=3D"box-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:= > 16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"= > ;Segoe UI","Noto Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Appl= > e Color Emoji","Segoe UI Emoji""><span style=3D"font-size:10= > pt;font-family:"Courier New";color:black"><span class=3D"gmail-Ap= > ple-converted-space">Many places afterwards same repeated Section reference= > s</span></span></p><p style=3D"box-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-= > bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFon= > t,"Segoe UI","Noto Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,&qu= > ot;Apple Color Emoji","Segoe UI Emoji""><span style=3D"font-= > size:10pt;font-family:"Courier New";color:black"><span class=3D"g= > mail-Apple-converted-space">In Section 3.1</span></span></p><p style=3D"box= > -sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47);fo= > nt-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe UI","Noto = > Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Color Emoji","S= > egoe UI Emoji""><span style=3D"font-size:10pt;font-family:"Courie= > r New";color:black"><span class=3D"gmail-Apple-converted-space">Figure= > 1 NGW is referenced as Network Gateway, Sigfox Network, cloud-based Sigfox= > Core Network</span></span></p><p style=3D"box-sizing:border-box;margin-top= > :0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47)"><span style=3D"font-size:10pt;= > color:black"><span class=3D"gmail-Apple-converted-space"><font face=3D"mono= > space">suggest Network Gateway (NGW)</font></span></span></p><p style=3D"bo= > x-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;color:rgb(36,41,47)">= > <span style=3D"font-size:10pt;color:black"><span class=3D"gmail-Apple-conve= > rted-space"><font face=3D"monospace">Section 8.1=C2=A0</font></span></span>= > </p><p style=3D"box-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px"><f= > ont color=3D"#000000" face=3D"monospace" size=3D"2">RFC 3967 says=C2=A0</fo= > nt><span style=3D"color:rgb(0,0,0)">IETF procedures generally require that = > a standards track RFC may not</span></p><pre style=3D"color:rgb(0,0,0)"> = > have a normative reference to another standards track document at a > lower maturity level or to a non standards track specification</pre><pre= > style=3D"color:rgb(0,0,0)">refers to SCHC Compound Ack reference?</pre><pr= > e style=3D"color:rgb(0,0,0)"><br></pre><pre style=3D"color:rgb(0,0,0)"><br>= > </pre><p style=3D"box-sizing:border-box;margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:16px;c= > olor:rgb(36,41,47);font-family:-apple-system,BlinkMacSystemFont,"Segoe= > UI","Noto Sans",Helvetica,Arial,sans-serif,"Apple Colo= > r Emoji","Segoe UI Emoji""><span style=3D"font-size:10pt;fon= > t-family:"Courier New";color:black"><span class=3D"gmail-Apple-co= > nverted-space"><br></span></span></p></div> > > --0000000000007c69df05efa47694-- > > -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
