Reviewer: Dale Worley Review result: Ready I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-shmoo-online-meeting-04 Reviewer: Dale R. Worley Review Date: 2022-12-06 IETF LC End Date: 2022-12-13 IESG Telechat date: [unknown] Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an informational RFC, with the possible exception of the possible nits listed below. Nits/editorial comments: 2. Some History participants later indicated in mailing discussion that the period of "mailing discussion" is an unusual phrase. Perhaps "mail discussion" was intended? intensive interims had a greater impact on their calendar than a single plenary meeting week, and in some meeting. The final "in some meeting" seems to be incomplete and (given the context) may be omitting something important. 3.3. Session/Break Length The longer breaks, while extending the day, provided adequate time for "hallway" conversations using online tools, exercise, and meals. Probably would be clearer as "... adequate time for meals, exercise, and "hallway" conversations using online tools." 4.1. Full vs. limited agenda (and interim meetings) This section heading and the one for section 4.2 are capitalized differently from the rest. But I expect the Editor will deal with that. 4.2. Flexibility of time usage Hackathon for fully online only meetings is usually held in the week "fully online only" has two modifiers with the same meaning. 4.4. Experiments Furthermore, the IESG SHOULD announce any such experiment in advance, so people can adjust to changes and potentially provide feedback. I would intensify this as "announce ... well in advance". 6.2. Informative References [_107-FEEDBACK] I see that there are a number of references with citation tags that have this unusual format. Verify this is the intended format rather than a formatting malfunction. [END] -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
