Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review result: Almost Ready I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-tsvwg-aqm-dualq-coupled-24 Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review Date: 2022-08-23 IETF LC End Date: 2022-07-21 IESG Telechat date: 2022-08-25 Summary: The content and technology of the document is outside the area of expertise, so my comments are mainly related to the readability of the document. I list everything as Nits/editorial issues, eventhough some could also be considered Minor issues. Major issues: N/A Minor issues: N/A Nits/editorial comments: ABSTRACT: I think the Abstract is too long. Also, it starts with the "This specification defines..." sentence. I think it should start with a few sentences on what the problem is, and then indicate what the document defines in order to solve that problem. INTRODUCTION (Section 1): In the beginning of the Section there is a "This document specifies a framework..." statement. Then, there is a similar statement at the end of Section 1.1., which is only supposed to describe the problem statement - not the solution. There is also a Scope section (1.2) and a Features section (1.4), but it is quite difficult to separate between Scope and Features. SECTION 2: It seems like the actual requirements for the framework are not presented until Section 2.5. I think the requirements should come earlier, before the solution. SECURITY CONSIDERATIONS (Section 4): There is quite a bit of text in the Security Considerations. In general that is not a bad thing :) My question is whether the content is actually about security? Much seem to be more "operational" issues. -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
