Re: [Last-Call] Rtgdir telechat review of draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-16

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Hi Yingzhen,

Many thanks for the review. 

Please see inline. 

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : Yingzhen Qu via Datatracker <noreply@xxxxxxxx>
> Envoyé : mardi 24 mai 2022 01:28
> À : rtg-dir@xxxxxxxx
> Cc : draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm.all@xxxxxxxx; last-call@xxxxxxxx;
> opsawg@xxxxxxxx
> Objet : Rtgdir telechat review of draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-16
> 
> Reviewer: Yingzhen Qu
> Review result: Has Nits
> 
> I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this
> draft. The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or
> routing-related drafts as they pass through IETF last call and
> IESG review, and sometimes on special request. The purpose of the
> review is to provide assistance to the Routing ADs.
> For more information about the Routing Directorate, please see 
> http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir
> 
> Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing
> ADs, it would be helpful if you could consider them along with any
> other IETF Last Call comments that you receive, and strive to
> resolve them through discussion or by updating the draft.
> 
> Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-16
> Reviewer: Yingzhen Qu
> Review Date: 05/23/2022
> IETF LC End Date: unknown
> Intended Status: Standards Track
> 
> Summary:
> Thanks to the authors for working on this document. I think it's
> almost ready for publication. There is one error in the appendix
> A.2 example that should be fixed before publication, and there are
> a few minor issues/nits that may be considered before publication.
> 
> Major Issues:
> 
> Appendix A.2:
> libyang[0]: Node "ldp-pw-type" not found as a child of "ldp-or-
> l2tp" node.
> (path: Schema location
> /ietf-l2vpn-ntw:l2vpn-ntw/vpn-services/vpn-service/vpn-nodes/vpn-
> node/signaling-option/signaling-option/ldp-or-l2tp/ldp-or-l2tp,
> data location /ietf-l2vpn-ntw:ldp-or-l2tp, line number 61.) This
> should "t-ldp-pw-type".
> 

[Med] Good catch. Fixed. Thanks.

> General Comment:
> A lot of descriptions about nodes exported from RFC9181 in section
> 7 are redundant from RFC9181.

[Med] We tried to find a balance between pointing to RFC9181 and ease the readability of the document. 

> 
> Minor Issues and Nits (line numbers are from idnits):
> 
> 397        Also, the L2NM uses the IANA-maintained modules "iana-
> bgp-l2-encaps"
> 398        (Section 8.1) and "iana-pseudowire-types" (Section 8.2)
> to identify a
> 399        Layer 2 encapsulation type.
> 
> [nits]: encapsulation type and pseudowire type.
> 

[Med] ACK. Changed to "encapsulation and pseudowire types"

> 409        view of the L2VPN service.  Such a view is only visible
> within the
> 410        service provider and is not exposed outside (to
> customers, for
> 411        example).
> 
> [nits]: Visible within/visible to

[Med] Fixed, thanks.

> 
> 500        'name':  Sets a name to uniquely identify an ES within
> a service
> 501           provider network.  This name is referenced in the
> VPN network
> 502           access level of the L2NM (Section 7.6).
> 
> [major]: I don't see where the "name" is referenced.

[Med] This is called here:

                       +--rw group* [group-id]
                       |  +--rw group-id                       string
                       |  +--rw precedence?
                       |  |       identityref
                =====> |  +--rw ethernet-segment-identifier?   string


A.4 provides an example how the segment is created and then how the name is called in the L2NM.

Updated the text with a pointer to that appendix. 

> 
> 577        The 'vpn-profiles' container is used by the provider to
> maintain a
> 578        set of common VPN profiles that apply to VPN services
> (Section 7.2).
> 
> [nits]: to be consistent with section 7.2: to maintain/to define
> and maintain
> 

[Med] OK. 

> 629        This document does not make any assumption about the
> exact definition
> 630        of these profiles.  The exact definition of the
> profiles is local to
> 631        each VPN service provider.
> 
> [nits]: These two sentences should be rewritten to be concise.

[Med] OK, shortened to: 

"The exact definition of these profiles is local to each VPN service provider."

> 
> 2785             leaf name {
> 2786               type string;
> 2787               description
> 2788                 "Includes the name of the Ethernet Segment
> (ES).";
> 2789             }
> 
> [nits]: please update the description

[Med] Updated to:

          "Includes the name of the Ethernet Segment (ES) that 
           is used to unambiguously identify an ES.";

> 
> 3824                   container active-global-parameters-profiles
> {
> 3825                     description
> 3826                       "Container for a list of global
> parameters
> 3827                        profiles.";
> 3828                     list global-parameters-profile {
> 3829                       key "profile-id";
> 3830                       description
> 3831                         "List of active global parameters
> profiles.";
> 3832                       leaf profile-id {
> 3833                         type leafref {
> 3834                           path "../../../../../global-
> parameters-profiles"
> 3835                              + "/global-parameters-
> profile/profile-id";
> 3836                         }
> 3837                         description
> 3838                           "Points to a global profile defined
> at the
> 3839                            service level.";
> 3840                       }
> 3841                       uses parameters-profile;
> 3842                     }
> 3843                   }
> 
> [question]: profile-id is a leafref to the "global-parameters-
> profile", where grouping "parameters-profile" is already
> included/used, why is it used here again? is it for configuration
> overwritten?
> 

[Med] We need to call out a specific profile (and use the same id) to be activated at the node level. Some of the parameters will be overridden. 



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