Hi Mach, Thank you for checking. All the changes are available in -05. BTW, it seems that your review is not tracked (still displayed as incomplete): https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-opsawg-sap/reviewrequest/15831/ Cheers, Med > -----Message d'origine----- > De : Mach Chen <mach.chen@xxxxxxxxxx> > Envoyé : mardi 17 mai 2022 08:43 > À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed INNOV/NET <mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx>; > rtg-dir@xxxxxxxx > Cc : draft-ietf-opsawg-sap.all@xxxxxxxx; opsawg@xxxxxxxx; last- > call@xxxxxxxx > Objet : RE: RtgDir Last Call review: draft-ietf-opsawg-sap-04 > > Hi Med, > > Thanks for considering my comments, I am OK with your resolution. > > Best regards, > Mach > > > -----Original Message----- > > From: mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx > <mohamed.boucadair@xxxxxxxxxx> > > Sent: Thursday, May 12, 2022 8:21 PM > > To: Mach Chen <mach.chen@xxxxxxxxxx>; rtg-dir@xxxxxxxx > > Cc: draft-ietf-opsawg-sap.all@xxxxxxxx; opsawg@xxxxxxxx; > > last-call@xxxxxxxx > > Subject: RE: RtgDir Last Call review: draft-ietf-opsawg-sap-04 > > > > Hi Mach, > > > > Thank you for the review. The changes to address the review can > be tracked at: > > https://tinyurl.com/sap-latest > > > > Please see inline. > > > > Cheers, > > Med > > > > > -----Message d'origine----- > > > De : last-call <last-call-bounces@xxxxxxxx> De la part de Mach > Chen > > > Envoyé : jeudi 12 mai 2022 11:11 À : rtg-dir@xxxxxxxx Cc : > > > draft-ietf-opsawg-sap.all@xxxxxxxx; opsawg@xxxxxxxx; last- > > > call@xxxxxxxx Objet : [Last-Call] RtgDir Last Call review: > > > draft-ietf-opsawg- > > > sap-04 > > > > > > Hello, > > > > > > I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for > this > > > draft. The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or > > > routing-related drafts as they pass through IETF last call and > IESG > > > review, and sometimes on special request. The purpose of the > review > > > is to provide assistance to the Routing ADs. For more > information > > > about the Routing Directorate, please see > > > http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir > > > > > > Although these comments are primarily for the use of the > Routing > > > ADs, it would be helpful if you could consider them along with > any > > > other IETF Last Call comments that you receive, and strive to > > > resolve them through discussion or by updating the draft. > > > > > > Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-sap-04 > > > Reviewer: Mach Chen > > > Review Date: 2022/05/15 > > > IETF LC End Date: > > > Intended Status: Standards Track > > > > > > Summary: > > > I have some minor concerns about this document that I think > should > > > be resolved before publication. > > > > > > Major Issues: > > > None > > > > > > Minor Issues: > > > 1. Section 2, the definition of Service Attachment Point (SAP) > is > > > hard to understand here, the definition depends on the > definition of > > > "service's endpoint" and "TP" that is not defined in the > document or > > > lack of references(if defined in other documents). > > > More text needed here and it's better to make it consistent > with the > > > definition in other places (e.g., Introduction section). > > > > [Med] Updated the text to: > > > > NEW: > > Service Attachment Points (SAPs): An abstraction of the > network > > reference points (e.g., PE side of an AC) where network > services > > can be delivered and/or being delivered to customers. > > > > > > > > 2. Section 3, > > > " The > > > model is also used to retrieve the network points where a > service > > > is > > > being delivered to customers." > > > What's the meaning of the "network points" here? Is it a node, > link, > > > interface or something else, some clarification needed here, > or > > > using a more specific and well-known term here. > > > > > > > [Med] An example was added to updated definition provided above. > > > > > 3. Section 4, " Also, the SAP is not a tunnel termination > point > > > (TTP) (Section 3.6 of > > > [RFC8795]) nor a link." Why need to state this here, maybe > it's > > > better to move it to the place of the definition of "SAP". > > > > [Med] We prefer to maintain it here as this section is about > > positioning the model vs. existing models. > > > > > > > > 4. identity basic-connectivity { > > > base vpn-common:service-type; > > > description > > > "Basic IP connectivity. This is, for example, a plain > > > connectivity offered to Enterprises over a dedicated > > > or shared MPLS infrastructure."; Since it's a "IP > > > connectivity", why emphasize that it is over an "MPLS" > > > infrastructure? > > > > > > > [Med] That was just an example. > > > > > Nits: > > > 1. Abstract section, the second sentence of paragraph, s/ The > > > Service Attachment Points/SAPs > > > > [Med] OK > > > > > > 2. Section 1, the last 3rd para, > > > it's better to add references when mention L2VPN and L3VPN > > > > [Med] Added a pointer to RFC4026. > > > > > > 3. > > > Section 3, suggest to add a reference to EVPN. > > > > [Med] Several EVPN-related are provided in Section 5 with > explicit > > association with the EVPN flavor. > > > > > 4. Section 5, suggest to add the references to LAG, IRB. > > > > [Med] OK > > > > > 5. identity virtual-network, suggest to copy the description > of > > > "Virtual Network" from RFC 8453. > > > > [Med] Went with the following: > > > > OLD: > > "Virtual network."; > > NEW: > > "Virtual network. Refers to a logical network instance > > that is built over a physical network."; > > > > > 6. It's better to add more text to the description of identity > phy, > > > loopback, lag and irb. > > > > [Med] These are well-known and well-established. I don't think > we need > > to say much here, but will see. Thanks. > > > > > > > > Best regards, > > > Mach > > > > > > -- > > > last-call mailing list > > > last-call@xxxxxxxx > > > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call > > > > ________________________________________________________________ > > _________________________________________________________ > > > > Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des > informations > > confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc pas etre > diffuses, > > exploites ou copies sans autorisation. Si vous avez recu ce > message > > par erreur, veuillez le signaler a l'expediteur et le detruire > ainsi > > que les pieces jointes. Les messages electroniques etant > susceptibles > > d'alteration, Orange decline toute responsabilite si ce message > a ete altere, deforme ou falsifie. 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