Nothing like jumping in late and editing the first sentence, but here
goes:
> The goal of the IETF is to make the Internet work better.
This is phrased a bit awkwardly, and implies that the Internet isn't
working all that well now. What about:
"The goal of the IETF is to ensure that the Internet continues to
work effectively."
And a few paragraphs later, to tighten it up a bit:
> Open process - that any interested participant can in fact
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> participate in the work, know what is being decided, and make his
> or her voice heard on the issue. Part of this principle is our
> commitment to making our documents, our WG mailing lists, our
> attendance lists and our meeting minutes publicly available on the
> Net.
>
>
> Technical competence - that the issues on which the IETF produces its
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> documents are issues where the IETF has the competence needed to
> speak to them, and that the IETF is willing to listen to
> technically competent input from any source.
> Technical competence also means that we expect IETF output to be
> designed to sound network engineering principles - this is also
> often referred to as "engineering quality".
>
>
> Volunteer Core - that our participants and our leadership are people
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> who come to the IETF because they want to work for the IETF's
> purposes.
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>
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> Rough consensus and running code - We make standards based on the
> combined engineering judgement of our participants and our
> real-world experience in implementing and deploying our
> specifications.
>
>
> Protocol ownership - that when the IETF takes ownership of a protocol
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> or function, it accepts the responsibility for all aspects of the
> protocol, even though some aspects may rarely or never be seen on
> the Internet. Conversely, that when the IETF is not responsible
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> for a protocol or function, it does not attempt to exert control
> over it, even though it may at times touch or affect the Internet.
>
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