Hi Qin, > On 24 Nov 2021, at 14:07, Qin Wu <bill.wu@xxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > > Hi, Klaas: > -----邮件原件----- > 发件人: Klaas Wierenga via Datatracker [mailto:noreply@xxxxxxxx] > 发送时间: 2021年11月24日 17:24 > 收件人: secdir@xxxxxxxx > 抄送: alto@xxxxxxxx; draft-ietf-alto-cdni-request-routing-alto.all@xxxxxxxx; last-call@xxxxxxxx > 主题: Secdir last call review of draft-ietf-alto-cdni-request-routing-alto-17 > > Reviewer: Klaas Wierenga > Review result: Has Issues > > Hi, > > I found 1 nit and one more substantial issue > > - the abstract says: > > OLD > RFC 8008 defines precisely the semantics of FCI and provides guidelines on the FCI protocol, but the exact protocol is specified. > > I think it should read > > NEW > RFC 8008 defines precisely the semantics of FCI and provides guidelines on the FCI protocol, but the exact protocol is not specified. > > - A bigger problem I have is with the Security Considerations > > You state "In the context of CDNI Advertisement, additional security > considerations should be included as follows:", you then list a set of > concerns, and then write: "Although protection strategies as described in > Section 15 of [RFC7285] should be applied to address aforementioned security > and privacy considerations, one additional information leakage risk > introduced by this document could not be addressed by these strategies. " > > So are they ADDITIONAL or were they ALREADY ADRESSED in RFC7285? Do you want to call the ones you list out as specifically relevant for this use-case? Please be clear why you list them here. And if they are NOT sufficiently addressed yet, you need to address them here. > [Qin Wu] : I believe these ADDITIONAL security has already been ADDRESSED by protection strategies proposed in RFC7285, but there is one exception case, i.e.," one additional information leakage risk > introduced by this document could not be addressed by these strategies." > Maybe the first paragraph and the second paragraph lack a good connection link, I would propose to make the following change: > OLD TEXT: > " > In the context of CDNI Advertisement, additional security > considerations should be included as follows: > " > NEW TEXT: > " > In the context of CDNI Advertisement, the following security > issues need to be considered as follows: > " Would it be clearer if you would write s/additional/specifically ? It seems you want to call out the one as of particular importance? > For the additional risk of leaking info from one uCDN to another uCDN it is unclear to me whether the intended mitigation is meant as normative (SHOULD instead of should) and I am curious why you don't make it a MUST. > [Qin Wu] I have no strong opinion on what language should be used, but I agree SHOULD is better than should. Perfect. Klaas > -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
