Hello Tero,
Thanks for your comments, useful as always. Please see a bit of
follow-up below.
On 3/22/2021 9:41 AM, Tero Kivinen via Datatracker wrote:
The title of the draft has some acronyms which are not expanded (AODV, P2P) and
if you expand them the title comes way too long. I would propose a usable
title, which might not need to use all possible acronyms, but would better
explain what this document is trying to do.
How about "Supporting Asymmetric Links in Low Power Networks"? Replacing
"LLNs" by "Low Power Networks" is probably O.K. because lossy is almost
implicit given low power (or, often, reality).
Nits:
In section 1 the text "RPL [RFC6550] (Routing Protocol for Low-Power and Lossy
Networks)" defines acronyms differently than what is used everywhere else. In
all other cases the document uses format where the acronym is in parenthesis
after the full text, i.e. "Routing Protocol for Low-Power and Lossy Networks
(RPL) [RFC6550]" format. I would propose using the same format also for here.
Done.
In section 1 there is acronym DAG which is not expanded, expand it on first
use.
I think that sentence reads better just omitting DAG.
Also there are unexpanded acronyms DAO, P2MP, which are not used anywhere
else, perhaps just expand them here. In same paragraph there is also acronym
MOP which is not expanded here on its first use, but it is expanded later.
Expand it here on its first use.
Done, except that I thought it would be better to exhibit the acronym
DAO since it is well known to readers familiar with RPL.
What is the difference between different reserve bits X and r in sections
4.1/4.2 and 4.3?
I made them all to be reserved bits 'X'.
Period missing from the end of sentence of the Option Length description in
Section 4.3.
Done.
In the IANA considerations section I propose add a note to RFC editor saying
that the sentences saying " The parenthesized numbers are only suggestions."
needs to be removed prior publication.
Done!
Naturally Yours,
Charlie P.
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