Reviewer: Dale Worley Review result: Ready I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-tls-ticketrequests-06 Reviewer: Dale R. Worley Review Date: 2020-11-27 IETF LC End Date: 2020-12-03 IESG Telechat date: Not known Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Standards Track RFC. Editorial comments: 2. Use Cases * Parallel HTTP connections: To minimize ticket reuse while still improving performance, it may be useful to use multiple, distinct tickets when opening parallel connections. To the naive reader, the ordering of the phrases doesn't seem to match the logical ordering of the concepts. Perhaps * Parallel HTTP connections: To improve performance, a client may open parallel connections. To avoid ticket reuse, the client may use multiple, distinct tickets on each connection. -- * Decline resumption: Clients can indicate they have no intention of resuming connections by sending a ticket request with count of zero. "have no intention" seems to me to suggest a decision that will not change. Since the future cannot be guaranteed, perhaps better wording is "do not intend to resume", suggesting a current state that might possibly change in the future. new_session_count The number of tickets desired by the client when the server chooses to negotiate a new connection. resumption_count The number of tickets desired by the client when the server is willing to resume using a ticket presented in this ClientHello. If I understand the processing which is suggested correctly, when the client sends a ClientHello, the server can choose to either negotiate a new connection, or (if a ticket is present in the ClientHello) the server can choose to resume the previous connection represented by the ticket. These two parameters provide the requested ticket count for the two situations. Assuming the above is correct, I would recommend changing the wording slightly, as "when" suggests a fact which is true over an extended period of time, whereas the provided counts are applicable in just this one instance: new_session_count The number of tickets desired by the client if the server chooses to negotiate a new connection. resumption_count The number of tickets desired by the client if the server chooses to resume (using the ticket presented in this ClientHello). (Change "the" to "a" in the last sentence if the ClientHello can present more than one ticket among which the server can choose.) [END] -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
