Reviewer: Russ Housley Review result: Almost Ready I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-6man-rfc4941bis-10 Reviewer: Russ Housley Review Date: 2020-09-11 IETF LC End Date: 2020-09-23 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Almost Ready Major Concerns: In Section 2.2, the discussion of DNS names comes out of the blue. In RFC 4941, there was context for this discussion that has been dropped from this document. Some context is needed. Minor Concerns: The Abstract says: "This document describes an extension that ...". It should state what protocol is being extended. I believe this is an extension for SLAAC. Nits: Section 1, first paragraph says: "... in [RFC7721],[RFC7217], and RFC7707." All three should be references. In addition, essentially this same sentence appears at the end of Section 2.1. I'm not sure the second one adds value. Section 1.1, last paragraph says: '... and not to "globally reachable" as defined in [RFC8190].' I think you want to say that this term does not imply "globally reachable" as defined in [RFC8190]. That is, it might be globally reachable, but it might not. IDnits reports: ** The document seems to lack an IANA Considerations section. (See Section 2.2 of https://www.ietf.org/id-info/checklist for how to handle the case when there are no actions for IANA.) == The 'Obsoletes: ' line in the draft header should list only the _numbers_ of the RFCs which will be obsoleted by this document (if approved); it should not include the word 'RFC' in the list. -- last-call mailing list last-call@xxxxxxxx https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/last-call
