Daniel & team, thanks for the kickoff (and to Paul for the first round of comments!) I've added our notes to a wiki page (https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Talk:F13_one_page_release_notes) so it's easier (hopefully!) for you to migrate it over to the main page (https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/F13_one_page_release_notes) when you start writing the final text - I think you're certainly ready to begin your drafts in that space now. Your original text: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/User:Mchua Paul's edits: https://fedoraproject.org/w/index.php?title=Talk%3AF13_one_page_release_notes&diff=166429&oldid=166377 My edits: https://fedoraproject.org/w/index.php?title=Talk%3AF13_one_page_release_notes&diff=166429&oldid=166381 Finally, I think Paul's tips are right on. This is also what I suggested to the team on IRC on Tuesday - look at the talking points and see if you can figure out the relationship between them and the one page release notes for F12. We haven't necessarily gotten it *right*, but it's what we've done so far, and it's something you can probably improve upon. ;) > You might benefit from comparing the Fedora 12 talking points to the > Fedora 12 one-page release notes. The talking points are designed for > our community members and Ambassadors, and since they understand > Fedora deeply, the talking points focus on features. The one-page > release notes are designed to be more "glossy" and appeal directly to > end users. > > If you look at the F12 versions, you can see how our talking points > get transformed from a statement of "Here's a cool feature" into the > one-page release notes statements of "Hers's what YOU can do with > Fedora" -- making the user the focus, as opposed to the technology. > > Here are the links you'll want to look at: > > https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/F12_talking_points > > https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Fedora_12_one_page_release_notes > > Hope this helps. One of the things that would be great is - as you're going along, think about how you would explain what you're doing to a team doing this for the next release cycle (6 months from now). Actually, you're already doing this - the questions you're asking and the drafts you're making are pointing out to us the kinds of resources and answers we need to have available to people making these in the future . --Mel -- marketing mailing list marketing@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx https://admin.fedoraproject.org/mailman/listinfo/marketing
