I am glad you mentioned draft release notes. I have two comments which follow which I marked up with colored text or with italics, followed by a personnal comment.
Within
Within
Abstract
This document lists all changed packages between Fedora 19 and Fedora
20. The packages are listed according to their RPM group. There is a
complete index at the end to permit the reader to locate a specific
package by name.
May I suggest the following words be inserted (red)
This document lists all changed packages between Fedora 19 and Fedora
20 as of the time of this posting. The packages are listed according to their RPM group. There is a
complete index at the end of this document permit the reader to locate a specific
package by name.
The Fedora Release Notes details the major changes in the latest version of Fedora.
My question
Should the sentence say
The Fedora Release Notes details the major changes between Fedora 19 and this latest version of Fedora.
My Conclusion
This set of release notes is a superbly organized composed set of presentation data. My congratulations to the group and to you Peter, for this really great structured document.
I am nobody special, just a end-user who appreciates the effort that went into its writing, researching, organizing, proofing and presentation.
1. Introduction
My question
Should the sentence say
The Fedora Release Notes details the major changes between Fedora 19 and this latest version of Fedora.
My Conclusion
This set of release notes is a superbly organized composed set of presentation data. My congratulations to the group and to you Peter, for this really great structured document.
I am nobody special, just a end-user who appreciates the effort that went into its writing, researching, organizing, proofing and presentation.
Regards
Leslie
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Leslie
Mr. Leslie Satenstein
An experienced Information Technology specialist.
Yesterday was a good day, today is a better day,
and tomorrow will be even better.
lsatenstein@xxxxxxxxxAn experienced Information Technology specialist.
Yesterday was a good day, today is a better day,
and tomorrow will be even better.
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From: Pete Travis <me@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
To: For participants of the Documentation Project <docs@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
Sent: Sunday, September 22, 2013 7:43 PM
Subject: F20 Technical notes are available for Review
I've just published the draft Technical Notes for Fedora 20. The updated
content should be available[1] within an hour or two, once the content
is picked up by the proxies. Technical notes are a great place for beat
writers to start, please take a look.
[1]
http://docs.fedoraproject.org/en-US/Fedora_Draft_Documentation/0.1/html/Technical_Notes/index.html
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