Nice Job, Ben. One change I would make ... under KDE: "The new shutdown dialog allows users with multiple operating systems can select which one to reboot to." I would reword that a little. Perhaps something along the lines of "A new shutdown dialog allows users with multiple operating systems to select the reboot OS." although simply replacing "can" with "to" would get 99% of the way there. --McD On Mon, 2011-10-24 at 20:34 -0400, Ben Cotton wrote: > Hey gang, > > I've written up a draft of the release announcement for Fedora 16 > since I volunteered for it in the meeting today. The draft can be > found at: > > https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/F16_release_announcement > > I did what I could based on the talking points and the feature list. > If you have any suggestions or edits, please feel free to edit the > wiki page. I've never written RAs before, and it turns out to be kind > of fun, so if you'd like to provide some constructive criticism > on-list, or out-of-band, I'd be glad to hear it! > > > Thanks, > BC > > -- > Ben Cotton -- docs mailing list docs@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx To unsubscribe: https://admin.fedoraproject.org/mailman/listinfo/docs
