Hi Adam,
Here's a crack at the Spin Description:
Spin Description
Xfce is a lightweight desktop environment for Linux and other *NIX
systems. Designed for productivity, it loads and executes
applications fast while simultaneously conserving system resources.
The purpose of Fedora Xfce Spin is to highlight the benefits of the
Xfce desktop's quick-and-clean interface, which enables users to
work faster and hassle-free. Xfce on top of Fedora's numerous
innovations make for a next-generation desktop experience!
Notes:
Concerning "Linux and other *NIX systems": you might as well add
"Linux and" before "*NIX", which could be potentially confusing for
new users. I don't think there's any bias in doing that since this
is the *Fedora* Xfce Spin ;-)
The Download Tab essentially just rewords the Spin Description, so,
IMO, should offer some different text. That said, I had to look up
what Xfce Spin actually is (a Fedora LiveCD that boots into the Xfce
desktop and can install to the hard drive as well, evidently).
Should that information be added to the Spin Description, Download
Tab, or is it noted (somewhat prominently) elsewhere?
Xfce rocks.
Cheers,
Silas
On 10/15/2009 11:20 PM, Adam Miller wrote:
Hello docs team,
My name is Adam Miller and I am one of the contributors who works
on the Fedora Xfce Spin and I'm currently working on our new spin wiki
page with all the info needed for the new Spin Pages that the design
team is working on, I'm no writer so I was hoping someone might lend a
bit of their talent towards cleaning up our "spin description" and
"download tab" entries[0], we (Kevin, Christoph and myself ... all
listed on the wiki page) just feel that what we want to say is being
said, but that its a tad "rough around the edges" and Kevin suggested
I come to the doc team and request their expertise, so I went to the
#fedora-docs irc channel and was directed to the mailing list, so here
I am :)
Many thanks in advance!
-Adam
[0] https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/XFCE_Spin
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