I can see the "smell" thing being a little odd. Lets try another one on for size. How about swapping: "Do you smell that? I think its almost done!" for "We've been cooking, and now its time for a taste test!" I think I like that one a lot more. - Adam On Thu, 2008-10-30 at 21:27 -0400, Paul W. Frields wrote: > On Thu, Oct 30, 2008 at 08:21:30PM -0400, Adam D. Ligas wrote: > > OK - I didn't see any responses to this. I opted to go for funny and a > > food theme. Funny because I like humor, and food because I'm actually > > quite hungry at the moment :). > > > > If this doesn't fit the tone of what we are looking for I have no > > problem throwing it out. I was really writing this more as an exercise > > to try to write something like this. > > > > That said, feel free to hack it up and make it look like someone who > > knew what they were doing wrote it :). I couldn't find a link to the > > release notes in the wiki, so that would certainly need to be added. > > Not bad! Some comments inline. > > > --- Fedora Preview Release Announcement Start --- > > > > Do you smell that? I think its almost done! > > We might want to go easy on the "smell" imagery unless we use gentler > words like "aroma" or "fragrance." But those sound a little goofy > too... > > > The Fedora Project is proud to announce the availability of the Fedora > > 10 Preview Release. The Fedora 10 Preview Release is our last > > pre-release offering before we let everyone taste the goods for real. > > > > Doesn't it smell yummy? We know you can't resist, and we don't want you > > to! We want everyone in the Fedora community to take an early sample > > and tell us what you find. We think the recipe is pretty good, but now > > is the time to make it perfect. > > > > And, since this is Fedora, we don't have anything to hide. You can take > > a peek at what is in the secret sauce by looking at our Release Notes in > > the Fedora Project wiki. We use 100% pure FOSS here, none of that high > > fructose proprietary stuff. > > Beautifully done! :-) > > > We expect that many of you will get nothing but a tasty treat, but some > > of you might experience something a little more bitter. Don't fret - > > all is not lost! There is still time to improve the recipe before we > > share it with the world. Just head on over to the Fedora Bugzilla > > (http://bugzilla.redhat.com) and let us know what offended your palate. > > > > If you'd like, you can even interact with the chefs more directly. You > > can join the live staff in the kitchen by coming to #fedora-qa on > > irc.freenode.net, or you can leave a message for the staff by sending an > > email to the fedora-test-list. > > > > Ready to get your free preview sample? Go ahead and swipe one straight > > from the oven - we don't mind. Put on your favorite heat resistant > > BitTorrent mitt and grab one of the following goodies. Take as many or > > as few as you like. > > > > Thanks for tasting! > > I think overall this is just fantastic, Adam -- nice job! Anyone want > to take an editorial swipe? > > -- > fedora-docs-list mailing list > fedora-docs-list@xxxxxxxxxx > To unsubscribe: > https://www.redhat.com/mailman/listinfo/fedora-docs-list -- fedora-docs-list mailing list fedora-docs-list@xxxxxxxxxx To unsubscribe: https://www.redhat.com/mailman/listinfo/fedora-docs-list
