--- Stuart Ellis <s.ellis@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > > DocBook: > http://www.se.clara.net/fedora/fedora-install-guide-0.4.0.tar.gz > > HTML: > http://www.se.clara.net/fedora/fedora-install-guide-en/index.html You might want to write a more cheerful and less technical introduction End users typically might not under what open source or 64/32 bit systems means. Try throwing around words like user friendly, full blown office,suites, games and stuff if you are targetting newbies esp desktop users 2. Before You Begin Might consider adding a note explaining the differences between these architectures and how they are supposed to identify which ones to download one of the FAQ's is the minimum amount of cd's required cd's to complete the installation. so you can mention that a personal desktop only requires that first two cds and that you can use the minimum boot iso image to do a http/ftp installation here potential questions to answer what does dhcp mean?. how do I identify whether my network is using dhcp? It might be worth moving this para to the section on network installation that follows 2.1. Installation on a Network I suspect that more people install fedora on their home systems and not on a network. consider moving this section to the pages where you explain the network setup options Chapter 1. Beginning the Installation "Fedora Core does not support installation from diskettes." I am not everyone would understand the term "diskettes" here. The explanation seems too technical and assumes that everyone would know what an RPM means for example.. Try this approach 1) Explain how to download and what to download and check the md5sum to verify that the download has been successful 2) How to write a CD image using to the disk 3) What are the types of installation and how to choose amoung them 4) what is the inventory of itmems that the end user is expected to know? 5) How do I allocate space and partition my system. whatis the recommended sizes. Would the installer be able to resize it? The installation guide should give the critical information is small easy to understand steps right at the start and explain the more technical points at the relavant sections. Currently the flow reads more like a reference 1.3. Booting from the Network using PXE what is PXE? Chapter 2. Upgrading Over An Existing System Would upgrading save my configuration and data? Is upgrading recommended over a clean installation? "2.1.1. Upgrading Boot Loader Configuration" explain that Fedora uses GRUB(Grand unified boot loader) as the default one. dont mention LILO prominently. Just add a note. its depreciated and likely to confuse the users reading it as to the differences and the choice Chapter 6. Network Configuration a short note on what DHCP means technically would be nice.. 6.1. Network Devices' "clickEdit" should have a space between the words. an example of sample configuration information should be added 6.2. Computer Hostname Home users typically need not worry about setting up a meaninful name and can choose one arbitrarily. it is also possible to change the hostname after the installation. reassure them of this 6.3. Miscellaneous Settings whats a DNS?. technical note 7.2. SELinux SE stands for Security Enhanced. link to selinux faq Chapter 10. Set Root Password Windows users will typically understand "administrator" better than "special user" "You have the opportunity to create a user account for yourself during the initial boot process." how about this: "You have the oppurtunity to create a non administrative user account for normal tasks towards the end of the installation process" the warning should also advise users against choosing easily identifiable personal information like a phone number of girl friend of the week as the password Chapter 12. About to Install the warning should also add that the users should press cancel or reboot? button to stop the installation if they dont want to continue I will send my feedback on the appendix later ===== Regards Rahul Sundaram __________________________________ Do you Yahoo!? Yahoo! Mail - Easier than ever with enhanced search. Learn more. http://info.mail.yahoo.com/mail_250
