On Wed, Nov 12, 2014 at 03:14:11PM -0500, Paul W. Frields wrote:
> On Wed, Nov 12, 2014 at 12:42:27PM -0600, Michael Catanzaro wrote:
> > Oooh, good job, marketing folks.
>
> Courtesy several contributors, including Robert Mayr, Ricky Elrod, Mo
> Duffy, and Ryan Lerch.
>
> I had another email that I think pulls in lots of your finds/fixes
> here, but wanted to address additionally the following:
>
> > On Wed, 2014-11-12 at 11:55 -0500, Paul W. Frields wrote:
> > * Nitpick: stylistically, I don't like the ampersand in "hobbyists &
> > students," that's not really typical or expected. Simply writing out
> > "and" would look better. [1] has some guidance on when to use these.
>
> Agreed, we'll fix that.
>
> > * "Fedora Workstation is a reliable, user-friendly, and powerful
> > operating system for laptops and PC hardware." This is a little
> > confusing. Is a laptop not "PC hardware?" Does this mean I can run
> > Fedora on any laptop, but only desktops that came pre-installed with
> > Windows? ("I'm a Mac, and I'm a PC" teaches us that the world is divided
> > between PCs and Macs, after all.) So it might be better to say
> > "...operating system for laptop and desktop computers" or something
> > along those lines instead.
>
> OK, I buy this, but what about even more friendly: "Fedora Workstation
> is a reliable, user-friendly, and powerful operating system for your
> laptop or dekstop computer."
Updated screenshot here:
https://pfrields.fedorapeople.org/images/workstation-page-201411121825.png
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