Author: kwade
Update of /cvs/fedora/web/static
In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv7273
Modified Files:
index.html
Log Message:
this is bettier, has more punch. I don't like the idiom, 'out front', it might be misunderstood, but the idea is more right. This could stand and be OK, but another iteration wouldn't hurt a bit.
Index: index.html
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RCS file: /cvs/fedora/web/static/index.html,v
retrieving revision 1.11
retrieving revision 1.12
diff -u -r1.11 -r1.12
--- index.html 24 May 2007 11:48:52 -0000 1.11
+++ index.html 24 May 2007 23:52:51 -0000 1.12
@@ -56,7 +56,8 @@
Fedora is a Linux operating system that showcases the latest in free and open source software. Fedora is <strong>always free for anyone to use, modify, and distribute.</strong> It is built by people across the globe who work together as a community: the Fedora Project. The Fedora Project is open and anyone is welcome to join.
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- The Fedora Project <strong>leads the advancement of free and open source software.</strong> When you use Fedora, this software is in your hands.
+ The Fedora Project is out front for you, <strong>leading the advancement of free and
+ open source software</strong>.
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<a href="http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Overview";>Learn more >></a>
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