Thank you Paul, I appreciate that. I also appreciate the feedback. I'm always open for comments to improve my writing skills and I'll be sure to keep it in mind for future articles and compositions. I'll keep you posted on the next article. Thanks and regards, Shaun Assam FAS: sassam Get Outlook for Android<https://aka.ms/ghei36> ________________________________ From: Paul Frields <stickster@xxxxxxxxx> Sent: Wednesday, October 9, 2019 9:54:02 PM To: Shaun Assam <thebeardedhermit@xxxxxxxxxxx> Cc: magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx <magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> Subject: Re: Cockpit article ready for review` Shaun, this is another slam dunk. You are really good at these articles. Each has been very clearly written and has just the right balance of content -- how to get core tasks done without getting too esoteric. One thing I did in editing... and this is REALLY nitpicky... is using "will" for future tense. I find I can usually eliminate this in favor of present tense for incrementally stronger writing. For example, "this button will turn the screen off" becomes "this button turns the screen off." Again, this is a nit. I found your prose easy to read and top-notch. Really well done! I finished minor edits on this article, so it's ready to go anytime. Paul On Wed, Oct 9, 2019 at 8:31 AM Shaun Assam <thebeardedhermit@xxxxxxxxxxx<mailto:thebeardedhermit@xxxxxxxxxxx>> wrote: Greetings, The 4th article in the Cockpit series is complete and ready for review. As always if there's any suggestions let me know. Regards, Shaun Assam FAS: sassam _______________________________________________ Fedora Magazine mailing list -- magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx<mailto:magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> To unsubscribe send an email to magazine-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx<mailto:magazine-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> Fedora Code of Conduct: https://docs.fedoraproject.org/en-US/project/code-of-conduct/ List Guidelines: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Mailing_list_guidelines List Archives: https://lists.fedoraproject.org/archives/list/magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx _______________________________________________ Fedora Magazine mailing list -- magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to magazine-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Fedora Code of Conduct: https://docs.fedoraproject.org/en-US/project/code-of-conduct/ List Guidelines: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Mailing_list_guidelines List Archives: https://lists.fedoraproject.org/archives/list/magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
